Stormy Evenings Enjoyed At Home

 

Let’s watch our weather in calms of our minds,

The quietude lulling, peace then be known,

Together raptured, this mood only finds,

Aware, temptation, before squalls are blown.

Slight wind wafts so closing, hushing to please,

Stillness uneasy, for gusts lift ardour,

Fervour lusts hunger, desire will not ease,

A storm now approaches, we beckon for more.

Love we are making, downpours from our sky,

As lightning is flashing, each strike shrills its bolt,

Thundered in passion, our tempest will cry,

Cloudbursts of loud cyclones, climax in jolt.

The height this twister, wet drenching subsides,

Old storming sated, a new one implied.

Reviews

[TheElfPrincess]

A nice poem. Well written.

[Peggy Gildon]

I agree with she wolf below. This is an amazing piece and what a wonderful metaphor.

[L]

like these couple in particular -

Cloudbursts of loud cyclones, climax in jolt.
The height this twister, wet drenching subsides,

Would be nice to see your sonnets in iambic pent. Counting ten won't even guarantee basic pentameter (five stresses); technically a line of pentameter can have anything from five to fifteen syllables (depending on the words used). Your penultimate line, for example, if spoken where the stresses naturally, only scans four, not five. It's mainly using trisyllabic feet.

Not speaking of the content here, of course.

[annie minus]

Great use of metaphor Rob, sensually satisfying and written so eloquently, a great read! Annie :)

[WindSong]

A beautiful love poem so skillfully written.

[SheWolfNLust]

ever so breathtaking, i loved the way you compared love making to a storm, and the passions felt herein, absolutely breathtaking, brilliant imaginary and depth of emotions as I found such pleasure in your every word xoxo

[Nicole Alexander]

i think this is a lovely poem filled with good imagery and much love between two people making love. i like the compaision to a storm. The imagery words out great. Thank s for the read.
I look forward to more poem of yours.
Hugs, Nicole

[teddybard]

As everb a poem to make you think (more by IM) well written wonderful words
and clever.

[FamaSemperVivat]

Lovemaking at it's finest. A wonderful poem full of sensual undertones (of course it could just be that I'm seeing undertones because I'm still reeling from Daytonight's "restless" poem) Awesome work!