The Perfect Tale; A Tragic End

Warm words of love, soft-spoken - were they true?

The sweetest summer passed in turns of song,

Harmonic days of bliss; two souls anew.
They stood, in hand, as Sun set days long gone.

The warmth, the touch, to melt their solitude,

And innocent, the words they played did show...

But tongues spit lies across the desert dunes,

When ice-cold hit, the words proved just as so;

When seasons changed, words fell among the dead.

What lay unspoken left them all contrite;

The perfect tale would bear a tragic end

Once cold consumed what once was true and right.

The day, it came, when all revealed as wrong,

And love, it died, with Summer's doleful song...

Reviews

[ANM]

Flowed from light to dark with consummate ease bravo!!!

[Briana O'Connor]

Beautifully woven. I love the way you so elegantly move from light to dark. Very exquisite imagery and emotion. Well penned

[Mazie]

thank you Briana ^^I look forward to reviewing more of your work too, I've just been bogged down with school work

[Angad Waraich]

Amazing.
From start to the end.
Masterfully written!

Thank you for sharing

-Angad

[Mazie]

thank you very much ^^

[Roger Turgeon]

It started out so sweet...and ended so sour....the trick is to remember the warmth of bliss and forget the cold of betrayal

[Mazie]

Yes I agree :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

It creates a deep pain while reading...

[Rene Salinas]

This is different, I don't often come along writings like this. God knows I have confessed to have issues with love poems but of course as most writings will revovle around love that is a bit of a silly statement. In here the "icy cold , icy dune" nature of the descritpion imbued me with. Stop! I am thinking about this and when you do that and ponder slowly fragmenting, it is more likely that you would be able to see things that otherwise you wouldn't in the heat of the moment. What its seen however will not come to cement the relationship sadly.

The vision must be followed by the venture. It is not enough to stare up the steps - we must step up the stairs.


Thankyou

[Mazie]

thank you very much for your review ^^ and I agree with you :)

[George Peck]

Amazing I love it. So true. As Always you done great a gain.

[Mazie]

Thank you very much :)

[Malister Mikey]

A good write happy to have read it thanks for the RR

[Mazie]

Thank you for taking the time to read :)

[Malister Mikey]

you're very welcome