Heart In Mend

Be not a sunny day nor blackened night

I go without regret for what I lost;

No way to see, my words and deeds at light,

were truly that; the act which brought the cost.

Now words could make me know, nor sights for-show

what soon would be our perfect friendship

Lost and, Oh! Not so - the "perfect" ties we hold,

And that, the gash which cannot stitch

Your gentle laugh and witty cracks are gone,

And I am here to face that pain I've known;

That tearing shred of heart I've patched upon,

Now does that patch wear thin when I'm alone...

And when you smile at me once again,

Be that the day you'll see my heart in mend...

Author's Note

One of my original sonnets - so it's a few years old
"witty cracks" refers to having a sense of humor.

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

Pretty nice to read. The aches of your beautiful heart piercing into the vein of the universe having some tears in your shimmery eyes. Very nice poem. Your emotions are enough to make this write glorious reading. And, yeah.. I hear you. Sometimes what we lost can never get it back throughout the whole life, and such things we always lost when we are in love, because once the love gone, it never comes back to the same life--Love's not meant to be returned nor the things we lost at night. Excellent work! ;)

[Mazie]

thank you so much ^^ and yes, I agree, love ca cause quite a bit of trouble, and I thin that can be universal...

[Wórdsmíth]

Welcome. Yeah.. it`s universal and it better be immortal with the wings of fragility. And, you know what.. love`s meant to be broken even that`s why people live with pain, feel, inhale and breathe the aches of love ... not because love`s worst because it`s a IInd chapter of it which reflects us if you don`t play the game right ... if you don`t give the right pair of shoes to love, love shows you how to delight the universe with the taste of awful periods of life. Keep writing my friend ;)

[Angad Waraich]

The moving and on and letting go phase of the relationship.
Wonderfully expressed.
The words clutch you heart.
Very well written.

Thank you for sharing.
-Angad

[Briana O'Connor]

I really like this one. The way the words are arranged leaves a sense of mystery that is quite beautiful. The pain and progress of mending is very well penned. Thank you for sharing.

[Sanduni Perera]

really nice piece of work.keep up the good work

[the white floyd]

I liked the "perfect" thing what you did there. Nice one #thewhitefloyd

[Mazie]

thank you ^^

[Dee]

From your choice words and the flow of them, this read like a dream except for a few lines that are out in the syllable count..but I enjoyed it very much. good rhyming too...Bravo.......Dee

[Emma Anderson]

I thought the witty cracks was obviously about humor so I don't see the need to put that in your notes. To me the whole poem was pretty clear and I love the way it's written.