Letting Go

this is the first poem i wrote as a kid

I was ready to let go, but you held me back

You crushed my heart and told me everything I lack

I cried for days till my eyes were sore.

And now you're begging for my heart you once tore?

The damage you made put a hole in my heart.

You made me realize we're destined to be far apart.

And letting go is a way to heal,

for all those pain I tried to conceal.

I will never forget the love I hoped to show.

For I know at the end, I have to let go.

Taking chances for this love to grow and make it last.

But this just made time passed by so fast.

We became strangers to ourselves and so as your love.

Love was replaced with pain and this is not what i wanted to have.

And now my freedom is within your grasp.

Don't try to hesitate, for this will be the last.

Author's Note

amateur writer/poet :)

Reviews

[Daughter of Darkness]

I think this is really really good and the fact you wrote it as a kid... I think it's amazing.

[Cladine]

This is beautiful. There's a time that we really have to let go so we can grow.But there's someone holding you back in the past and dragging you once again after all that they've done.This piece is very provocative and my favorite line"I cried for days till my eyes were sore.And now you're begging for my heart you once tore?".

[Curls]

Thank you for the review! :)

[dan]

Curls, First of all I want to thank Maja for submitting this for my review. You say it was your first poem written when you were "a kid?" I can tell by the plaintive tone that it is a fact, but the subject of the piece is redolent in poets five times your age. The twists and turns, the gives and takes of the process of deciding if love is present or if it is only a hope? Get used to that because until you find THE RIGHT ONE that dilemma will forever rear its head. You may be very young now but the mysteries of love have no age limits. A very nice write! take care...dan

[E.L. Debbage]

I read this believing it was a recent piece and I've got to say, i'm impressed with the younger you. Such obvious flair and talent. So empathetic and thoughtful.

[DoormanDan]

That first piece of writing we create almost always has something special to it that no other piece we write, no matter how much better it is, will ever be able to recapture. For your first poem, this is pretty good. The rhymes don't feel forced or clumsy, and you told a very relatable tale in a very effective manner. I saw a few small typos though;

"for all those pain I tried to conceal." It should be "the" not "those"

"But this just made time passed by so fast." It should be "pass", not "passed".

Other than those, I have nothing to really point out. You've done a great job with this piece, my friend. Give your younger self a pat on the back! :)