Society

I wrote this poem after hearing about the legalization of same-sex marriage in the US. And it's a little sad that some people had to use religion just to hate. #LoveWins

The tree of life mutters the right.

The leaves that thrives to be the tree.

"Sinful thee of thee's existence" they fight

and shout at the weeds that also seek to be

Looking down with hurtful eyes

At the minority with a non-existent right.

Looked down and fed with lies

that one should be banished within their sight.

One weed stands for the rest

to fight for a lie one has been blessed

Two weeds stand lest

to be treated of what shouldn't be said.

The tree of life hears the two

with open ears, He hears the truth.

The tree of life gives them too

what the leaves have, rough and smooth.

Author's Note

I'm just an amateur writer. ( i don't even know if i should be considered as one)

Reviews

[Devons]

Based on this showing, I think you should certainly be considered a writer.
I think this poem could relate to any particular prejudice, it has an open, universal language. I particularly like:
"Sinful thee of thee's existence" they fight
and shout at the weeds that also seek to be"
There is great wisdom and understanding contained within this piece, and it has been compiled and constructed with a certain amount of delicacy and more, intelligence.
Concerning the specific subject you are referring to, I believe people should have equal freedom of choice in this sense. However, I'm not entirely convinced of the validity of wishing to partake in a ceremonial institution which is derived from a purely religious rite that is based entirely on Man and Woman only, as a natural procreative relationship. It is out of date, perhaps, and I think such a progressive sense of sexuality is as incompatible and somewhat incongruous as the simple rites that this religious ceremony adheres to. That's something way beyond prejudice I think though - if it were me, I would want to create my own kind of marriage rites. And in a way I find there's as much hypocrisy in same sex marriage as there is in an agnostic wanting to be married in a church. Just a point of view, however.
Anyway, that's irrelevant essentially when it comes to the poem itself - which I think stands above that thorny issue, and deals with prejudice and double standards in a far more reaching generality.
A good piece of work.

[Curls]

Thank you! :) This really helps a lot. :)

[Deepak Sharma]

You wrote well.nice efforts

[Curls]

Thank you so much! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the way you used description. Create vision and place by your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Curls]

Thank you! :) have a beautiful day!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You've done a fine job tackling a sensitive subject with class.

[Curls]

Thank you. I really appreciate it. :)

[dan]

The way you breathe life to things in nature and imbuing them with human qualities and feelings is a beautiful bit of creativity in the piece. Your lines have a smooth flow to them and are really easily accessible. Nice way to start my reviewing for the day. I thank Maja for sending me the read request. Thanks to you both. take care...dan

[Curls]

Thank you for appreciating it. I just don't know what to say.. Thank you so much!

[Marcus K]

I like this. It has a certain flow that makes it interesting. I do have one suggestion.
"Sinful thee of thee's existence"
I would change "thee's" to "thy"
For me it flows better. But that's just my opinion. Which ever word is used - I enjoyed this read.

[Curls]

Omg, thank you so much for that. Thank you for the kind words!

[Maja]

You are.. so good at this. The way you used the imagery was spot-on. Everyone has the right to exist, and everyone has the right to be treated just like everybody else. This poem speaks volumes. How you used the weed as a symbol for the "minority" - which actually isn't, by the way, if you think about it - and how it was necessary that the tree listens because it was the only one capable of giving what the weeds wanted. Beautiful writing. :)