I Broke My Locket Today

A short little poem I wrote a few years ago. The locket is supposed to represent a heart.

I broke my locket today, and you weren't there to fix it.   I thought back to all those times before, when you where always there, waiting, calmly, to fix it as good as new. No matter what I had done. I broke my locket today, and you weren't there to fix it. They came and told me today, told me what had happened. They said you where doing what you do best, you where fixing lockets. But there was a problem with your locket. A problem that nobody knew about.   I broke my locket today, and you weren't there to fix it. They said your locket shattered, in all its wonderus glory of age, it couldn't hold up. They said you where gone before they knew, before they knew what had happened. I broke my locket today, and you weren't there to fix it.   Won't you come back and fix it one last time?

Reviews

[Daydreamer54]

Wow. creative use of symbolisim. i was a little confused...but that's ok. I liked it!

[J.S. Pua]

nice..
effective repetition..
well written..
good work..

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[Julie]

I LOVE this.

[nostal]

Cute.
I think the repetition is effective.

[rielovella]

Nice poem. Keep up the good work!

[The Analog Kid]

Nice symbolism. Also, I like the way the narrator implores in the last line..."Won't you come back and fix it one last time?" Well done.

Patrick

[Mary]

wow, very deep and meaningful, great write!!!:)

I hope it doesn't offend you, but there's something precious about this poem.