leftover/if

I want to ask him if he still thinks I'm beautiful

if he still can't resist me

if I still make him feel things he never knew before me

if I still make him happy

if I'm still the one

or if I would be touched in a manner that made me feel less like a chore if I looked more like her

Reviews

[JC]

It's tough when you get to that place where the magic is gone, when something that seemed so amazing and indestructible falls away. Enjoyed the read. Good to see fellow Canadians as well. I'm also in Van.

[Bare trees]

That last line is where I stumbled. I would suggest making it a bit clearer or revising it in some way to make it simpler.