Chapter 1 1934

1934

May was now singing solo in the church choir and had been invited to join a choral group.

Arthur meanwhile had begun an evening class in motor car maintenance at the local technical college, Leeds United had registered all their players as motor car drivers before the intended testing came into force. Arthur was also taking part in running races and a few cycling races during the summer periods as a means of keeping himself fit for his football.

 

Arthur and May continued to see each other as their private lives and commitments allowed, Arthurs football had priority with him, there were several Saturdays when the team bus didn’t return in time for him to get to the Gala

May’s singing kept her busy; her repertoire now included various opera songs, which she could sing in both English and the original language.

Arthur asked May if they should become engaged “I would love to, but my dad would not agree just now, he would say that we are too young; I don’t want to offend either of you, can we just leave it for now; I will let you know when I think it is right bring it up with him”

They decided to become engaged for Mays twenty first birthday, “I am my own woman then! she said.

So it was left until May was ready

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm afraid that your earlier chapters show your penchant for the more nuts-and-bolts type of detail, whereas this chapter reveals your sparse representation of the relationship details! This story seemed to leap over a few months worth of details to put us WAY too quickly into the "engagement" mode! I'm sure the guys would be OK with this, but women are often the ones who read stories like these & so I would spend more time on the back-and-forth of courting. As for your material, I'm reminded of how I used to sew & sing & ride bike & so much more, for my youthful pastimes . . . yet nowadays, the younger folks seem to have no hobbies or interests besides seeking something nebulous on the ether waves & then bemoaning it when it's not very lasting or satisfying. We surely had it over today's youth, with the standard of being involved in so many endeavors to keep us occupied & entertained, huh? (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Wild Rose]

Thanks again
I do know it was a bit sparse in detail and the stuff ladies like (have to re read some of mainlaws Cathrine Cooksons books)
I am more used to writing how technical things work

[Einstein Noodle]

initially i want a smoother transition into this "chapter" ...there seems a lot of empty life between this and the previous chapter ... but then the thought occurred to me that perhaps i am reading a play .. and this is setting the next scene ..but it doesn't do that ... it stands alone ... i am hooked on reading more so you haven't lost me ..i think the adage "don't TELL me...SHOW me" ... might well be applied here .. its a short chapter, moves the story along with gaps .. needs showing rather than telling ... onward says i! onward again!
E.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you - written some time ago - as thoughts came to mind
I do really need to put them into a proper order, fill in gaps etc > Now winter is upon us and less time outside

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...............

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good chapter. I like the way they kept in touch and how she planned her life. Thank you Wild Rose for sharing the amazing chapter.
Coyote

[Wild Rose]

From what I understand they had full lives apart (James - mays dad and my grandfather) was strict _ His Irish Catholic up brining May wasn't allowed to go dancing - But was allowed to carry her cousins drum kit into the hall

Vert much like the problems now with Muslim girls wanting to have more freedom like their Christian friends including no planned / forced marriages - yes I understand them

[Chris Shaw]

Yes I agree with Margie here, I think you could provide some more detail regarding their courtship and leading up to the engagement. That's what women like to read about. Especially covering that period of time, because things were so more formal then. It contrasts so greatly with what happens now or probably doesn't happen now as less and less people seem to be marrying preferring to live together. So from the reader's point of view you are providing a bit of history. I think you could pad this out more.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you for your comment
I wrote this from what I was told > Yes our family history > I will give it some thought - re read it - then see how I can make it more attractive to you ladies > Just don't want to go too sexy & get banned > and to me she was mum -----

[Chris Shaw]

Hee hee, no keep the sex out of it but just see if you can find some more detail about their romance