The wind

What I feel about the wind

The wind is so invisible,

I could hardly touch it.

It blows on my face,

Showing its elegance and my thoughts,

Blow away with it.

The wind,

It makes me feel protected, 

And so strong.

My hair flows with it,

While my body,

Shifts in the same place.

Wind can get angry,

Sweet and caring,

Everyday it changes like us.

Wind will always be there,

For us,

All eternity, it is our true friend.

Author's Note

Pls review

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Loving this too, I can relate to the pleasant feeling of the wind blowing against your face. I'd always have the urge to yell dramatic wind effect hahaha

I love this and find that your unique style in writing is evident here as well

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Thank u! :D

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Welcome, forgot to say this but I thanks for sharing

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No problem! :D

[Roxana]

Truly great this is! I love your poems! 100-100 'Thumbs up everyone'

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Tnx Roxana! It's truly admiring how u review stories! I can't wait till u post your next chapter! :)

[Roxana]

I've been working a long time on it i'll try posting it as soon as I can and you're welcome :)

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KK :)

[PurpleQuartz]

I love the wind. I love the way you expressed it

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Tnx! :)

[Pax]

a nice view on the wind. And i find it really refreshing. Great work!

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Thank u! :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

like this poem :D
really, this is my feeling also about wind

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Tnx! xD

[Mia M.]

I understand what you mean. :) and you put my feeling into words. It's really good!

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Tnx! :D

[Steven Cash]

I love a song named 'The Wind'

well, poems' good too :)

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Tnx for the review! :D

[Steven Cash]

no prob

[Persona]

The breaks at the end of the line don't work. I like your words and your childish perspective, very cute. But here's what I'd do - take the three lines you have at some points and turn them into one. If you read it aloud, breathing after every comma, you'll see the awkwardness of it. For example, the first stanza could easily be one whole line. I do like the font though, and its size. "its" is the correct use, as your use suggests "it is." You use very basic vocabulary here, and seem to repeat yourself. "Blows" "blow away" try "my thoughts which whistled away" or something. Make the wind become an animal, rather than it just blowing. Use more than feel, use the sense of sound!

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Tnx for the review I'll think about it :D

[Bluefire]

Very nice, just how I feel about the wind. Well written and unique. I like it :3

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Thank u! :D

[Bluefire]

No problem.