Computer Travels

Computer Travels

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I was just a normal farmers daughter called Gwen, until my 13 birthday came.

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I was just a normal farmers daughter called Gwen, until my 13 birthday came.

I always had in mind that when children become 13 they would have bad luck.

I didn't have to wait long till mine came because that's where our story begins.

 

It wasn't long before I got up my parents came into the room and hid a few presents. I would prefer having them on the kitchen table and opening them there, but hiding the presents was a family tradition so I had to respect it. My life was a boring one for my parents didn't have enough money to fly to England or go down to Barcelona for 2 days. So I lived all my life in the Pyreenes. It wasn't that bad, I mean I went hiking every weekend with my best friend Sara and in winter I went skiing or snowboarding everyday.

Once I got up I knew my parents had been there my mum always left the smell of perfume in the air and my dad always left a trail anywhere he went. When I found all the presents I went down to the kitchen. I wondered what my mum could be cooking and that's when I went into the kitchen.


"Happy birthday!!" they all shouted 


I saw my favourite breakfast food on the table and exclaimed

"Thanks, all of you!"


And that's when we went in for a hug.


After eating all the delicious food on the table I told mum how much I loved the cake, grabbed my skateboard and went down to school. My sister didn't skate so she usually took the bicycle, whilst my brother took the bus, he usually told us how he hated using skateboards or bicycles because of the accidents he had with them.

 

When I arrived at the locker a voice behind me shouted


"Gwen,Gwen!!" It was Sara she always had a way of coming to me at the begging of classes and endings. She was my best and first friend, we met in 1st of primary when I decided to play a trick one boy called Walter.


"Happy birthday!" she said and gave me a present.


"What is this?" I asked

Open it she told me, I unwrapped it and there it was the new destructor movie.


"OMG! How did you get this? It went out today" I asked


"My dad owns all the cinemas in this country I had this a month ago" she explained. I was about to thank her when the bell rang and we had to go to ICT.

 

"Right, I want all of you to write an adventure story 10 pages maximum" said Mrs Green our ICT teacher.

Everyone started writing their stories, making an annoying sound with the keyboards and (as usual) copying their neighbours. That was the one thing Mrs.Green didn't tolerate.

I sat next to Sara and Brenda. Brenda was an exchange student from Canada, whom I met some days ago when our class went hiking. She had a cousin named Coral. Coral and I had been friends since we were born. So she was like a sister to me.

Anyway, once the 4 of us started our computers, there was a flash as fast as light in front of us and the class disappeared and we found ourselves inside the school's main computer.

It was different than we expected.

The place was exactly like looking at the desktop from the outside just it was from the inside. There were folders floating by and papers coming out of them, emails coming from every corner, letters rushing to there words and sentences. 


"Where in the world are we!?" shouted Brenda, not really believing

she was in a computer.  


"Inside a computer?" guessed Sara, who started looking around.


"Isn't that... I don't know impossible!" started Coral wanting to start an argument.


"Well, what do you expect this is" went on Sara, who was a little ahead of her. Whilst they argued about where we where, I thought to myself : 'Really of all the things that could happen!'

I was very sure it was the bad luck of becoming 13 that day, until I heard a buzzing sound.


"Are those bees?" asked Brenda seeing some funny looking things in the distance.


"I don't think so" answered Coral, who had no idea what they were.


"They're ....." started Sara but couldn't end the sentence.


"Virus! Run!" I shouted. We all looked for a place to hide, but it was impossible we were inside a computer it's not like we would find a door at every corner. But then it struck me.


"Quickly go into one of the folders" I told them and we all ran to the first folder we could find.


We all went into the one which read: 

'School Notes'


We all landed on a pile of papers spread on the floor.


"Phew! That was close" commented Coral, she was started getting fed up on landing on piles of papers everywhere she went.


"Yeah! It's amazing!" mentioned Sara looking around to what looked like pure white shelves, with papers organized from A to Z very neatly.


"Yeah! I know, we are actually inside a computer" I noted not knowing what she referred to.


"No, they didn't put a password for this folder" pointed out Sara, she looked like she had idea.


"So?" asked Brenda, who hated asking questions, but she got used to it that morning.


"Our notes are in here" I thought, hoping Sara wasn't going to write different notes on our papers.


"You aren't going to do what I think you are, are you?" observed Brenda, she had finally understood want Sara was thinking.


"Of course not" assured Sara, who was a little upset she wouldn't get the A+ she deserved in gym.


"Good, now how do we get out of here" said Coral, she was already school sick and she hated school. After saying that we where circled by virus from every corner and in our hands we had swords.


"OK, are we going to have to do what I think we have to do?" feared Sara, thinking she would have to kill viruses.


"Yup!" we all answered, we were as afraid as Sara. We all started killing viruses until we could only see a box with numbers changing every second.


"What's that?" asked Coral about to touch but I stopped her. 


"A bomb" I added quickly, trying to hold down tears of fear.


"But it only has 30 seconds left" went on Sara, who was exploding herself. 


"And that is going to clean the computer from one side to the other" confirmed Brenda, fearing she wouldn't see her home again.

We all started panicking until I saw the exit button.


"Come on!" I shouted already running in the direction of the button.


Once we were all inside the big circle (button) we pressed and got out of the computer in less than a second.


Next thing we knew we where in front of our computers starting our stories. We looked at each other and then looked at the clock.

We had been in the computer for half an hour and no one even knew.

 

 

 



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Author's Note

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Pls comment. Tnx so much for reading.

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good write... don't add parenthesis let your story breathe on its own without you adding something to inform us additional info...
I liked it so far.. and this is a unique one...
Sorry if my review somehow may offend you...
Honesty is the best policy after all
*Thumbs up:

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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12 Years Ago

It doesn't offend me on the contrary I love it when people corect me. Tnx =)
Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

You're always welcome



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Very cool :3 I liked it

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12 Years Ago

Tnx! :)
Bluefire

12 Years Ago

No Problem
Interesting chapter, I really like it.
100/100

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12 Years Ago

Tnx alot! :)
I like the concept of this and i did a little chuckle to myself when i read the first few line because when i was 12 i worried that turning 13 would be unlucky! :-) As i was reading it felt quite quick, my suggestion would be add some description about places, people, just enjoy introducing the reader into your world! Also i think you could make more of the moment where they flash inside the computer and teh computer world: builing tension is always good! You create very interesting characters and you named them well, quite quirky! The dialouge is also natural and believeable! Please dont take offence at this lengthy review, but i really like your idea and it has alot of potential!

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12 Years Ago

tnx and it's ok I learn things from other writers so tnx again
I enjoyed reading this one.Pls, contunue.

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12 Years Ago

tnx I will post the next one when I have time. And all I can tell u is that it's another travel.
good write... don't add parenthesis let your story breathe on its own without you adding something to inform us additional info...
I liked it so far.. and this is a unique one...
Sorry if my review somehow may offend you...
Honesty is the best policy after all
*Thumbs up:

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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12 Years Ago

It doesn't offend me on the contrary I love it when people corect me. Tnx =)
Rhianne Ney

12 Years Ago

You're always welcome
Though lacking in description I appreciate this kind of writing but may I suggest that you enclose dialogue in quotation marks? Sorry but I really like a lot of things organized. But the flow of your story isn't necessarily confusing. I think it flowed well but there were bumps in the road.

Overall, though, I liked it. It gives you the natural feel of the character and I like it. Your character has a natural side to it and I appreciate it, well done.

Please keep writing :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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12 Years Ago

Tnx I always forget to put the quotation marks sorry
Katherine Enma Pineapple

12 Years Ago

No need to apologise it's just me and my obsessive quotation marks problem o.e and you're welcome :D
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K.G
this is interesting :3 slightly confuseing though, add more details, be more discriptive, if u need to, look at the books that u read :3 other then that it was an enjoyable read

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K.G

12 Years Ago

haha ur wellcome love :3 tip, what what u cant hold in down first, then once ur done writeing all th.. read more
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12 Years Ago

tnx for the tip
K.G

12 Years Ago

n.p love :3

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