Lost from Within

Endless depth of wonder cast aside

                            A barrier too strong

         Eats me alive

Falling with no ground

                 No air to breathe

Trapped!

                 Energy fading into the abyss

                              Soul quenching fury

Tearing apart every inch of my body

                                   Ripping it to shreds

A mere dust in the wind

                    The wind that is dead

Dropping with unimaginable speed

                               Dissappearing into the dark

Crossing sides with myself

                          Fearing the unknown

                                 Longing for hope

A path!

                    Show me the way

                         Show me the light!

Every turn and corner

               Thrown against walls that bound me in chains

I am lost...

Yet to be found.

Reviews

[ShaneBerry]

a mixture of emotions here, and tantalizing imagery, this is going in my favorites, and i am going to share this on Facebook with some of my friends if you do not mind, this was very very well written and the form you typed it in was very different. amazing work my friend.

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[alifeacoustic]

beautiful images painted from within the torment of fear, hoping that something or one will be there to catch you, while ultimately dreading the end of the abyss. Beautifully witten. thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it.

[Greg Skura]

Have I landed yet, I was pulled right into the fall of it all. Great imagery!

[patricia]

A good "What's it all about theme" I liked ...Crossing sides with myself. The opening line shows the writer's awareness of what will be missed. Sad but kind of necessary for this poems journey.

[dreaming dame]

Sad but very descriptive. Beautiful. :)

[The Cute 1]

i like

[KAREN]

Well written and great flow. A strong powerful write!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Well written with lots of emotion!

[Lily Mae]

Desperation and need it what I felt so strongly.. A great write..xx

[sissybug]

This is a sad poem, i like word choice you used. I think it is a great write! Good Job! :)