Teardrops

Saddness flows through my body

Heart wrenching pain attacks me

Draining my every will

No more happiness is felt

 

Traveling through my veins

Causing me to weep so slowly

Undesirable shocks of reality

Blasting me in the mind and soul

 

Eyes becoming the faucets

With no way of turning them off

Teardrops sprinkle out

With each one a dream falls

 

Sparkling with pure sorrow

A pain no one wants to see

Chilling down into the very core

A soul dies from the pain

 

Dripping down the outer shell

The one that is crumbling down

Giving up the point of battle

When there is nothing left

 

Teardrops crash down on the floor

An ocean for creatures so small

Wailing with anguish

A dark cloud forms in the heart

 

Alone and forgotten

And broken as well

Teardrops show the pain

But only half is shown

 

Never shower the space around

Never give life from tears

Holding back the pain

Store it away into your soul....

 

Teardrops form the chapters of life

They also end them as well...

Reviews

[Madison A. Wright]

well done.... nothing but raw emotion and feelings poured into this one!!

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

This is the deepest poem I have ever read, Good job

[Just Brooke]

Wow! amazing how it draws the reader in! I like how easily it flows and how your words are arranged. You vent very well, I mean you put emotions into your writing in a way that allows the reader to feel your emotion instead of growing bored. This is captivating beauty! Keep writing you are very talented!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This poem made me feel sad .. it is well written , the story of pain, sadness and tears. Very good flow and tempo.
Caught the emotions well ..

Chloe

[KAREN]

Heartfelt and emotional! You captured sadness and pain so well!!

[Ravyne Hawke]

Such a beautiful poem about pain ..I love the tears metaphor, your use of imagery, the flow of the poem. Very well done!

[Dilan Gray]

I loved this poem so much. The images were beautifully written and perfectly displayed the feelings of sadness and loss. This was so great, I can't even explain how much I loved this poem. I thought it flowed so well and your word choice was great! This poem was beautiful!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Beautifully written, the sadness etched so well by your words. Each teardrop is like a piece of us torn from our heart. A favourite.

[Ayumu♥]

"Saddness flows through my body
Heart wrenching pain attacks me
Draining my every will
No more happiness is felt"

I love how you started this but the last line sounds a little strange, other than that I really liked this poem it really showed the feelings of sorrow and paints a picture in the readers mind. Whether it be the loss of a loved one, or a break up or realization of a harsh reality. Very well-written. Great job. :)

[♥Chloe-The-Zombi..]

this is great. i can relate to it. my favorite line was:

"Sparkling with pure sorrow
A pain no one wants to see
Chilling down into the very core
A soul dies from the pain"

its nice. 100/100