What Did I Do?

What did I do to deserve..

...You...

...Your Love...

...Warmth...

What did I do to deserve..

Hope.

What did I do to deserve..

...Pain...

...Loss...

...Tragedy...

What did I do to deserve..

...Heartbreak...

...No friends...

...No love...

...Only hate...

What did I do to deserve..

...Loneliness...

...A scar...

What did I do to deserve..

Death.

Two sides to every coin

What may seem fine

                                      Could hold a secret to all mankind.

Reviews

[Madison A. Wright]

love it... i feel like you have asked the questions that run through my head everyday..

[lovejulez03]

Very well done. The emotion is intense and I felt every bit of it. Great!

[cfix]

so-very powerful and real emotion.
I really enjoyed the honesty in this write.
This is amazing!!!!

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

wow this piece is very powerful
I would play around with the wording a little bit though
but that is just me

[Jessica Marlow]

I love it!!! i feel the same way right now but i think about the problem and laugh because im worth more than him.... I like the analagy to sides to every coin very true and if you flip it you dont knw which way it may land:)

[Rose Masen]

Tense piece. A lot of emotion in this, asking a lot of burning questions. Nice job.

[Hayley]

First of all, I like the repetition, but I think you could possibly play around with breaking it up into stanzas and the structure overall. I like the order of it, however, and the last couplet wraps it up nicely.

[Michael.]

I feel kind of on the fence about this one.
I like the style you're using in this but I'm not sure if I really like it.
I'd mess around with some of the structure.