Keep you safe

I would keep you 

in a cottage by the sea 

Blue curtains 

breathing with the breeze 

Wild flower crowns 

and pebble shores 

I would gather you close 

I would hold on tight 

Knowing that this moment 

the glass jar

would shatter 

would crack 

Like a bomb 

like a gun 

screams and blood 

The innocence wouldn't last 

The golden hues of yesterday 

would splinter and die among the ash 

You've exchanged crowns for crosses 

Life for the face of a cause

Oh, Had I kept you 

in a cottage by the sea!

I might be waiting your journey home, instead of you waiting for me. 

Reviews

[sinNsincerity]

I literally saw that jar explode in my mind. That was awesome.

[Julia Ledo]

LOVE this rhyme scheme. So clever and sweet. The near rhymes make the words seem softer somehow and then the last stanza has an exact rhyme that makes it stand out where the words punch a little harder

[Mara]

wow a touching emotional piece i like the way you turned it from beauty to destruction in such few lines, great job!

[AaronFreitas]

I like this one Crystal... very clear topic and I love the way you maneuver through each line making each important in its own. Good work :)

[Lluvs]

Such a beautiful and powerful poem (:

[Thom]

I really enjoyed that Crystal. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Emily]

This is one of my favorites poem of yours!
Keep on writing Crystal!!

[dan]

Crystal, Such a poignant, image-laden write! I have to admit my eyes got a bit wet reading this. I don't think it's what you intended but the images flecked with violent hues put me to mind of the attacks in Paris and the mess this world is devolving into. You always use such clever wordplay that makes your writes extra enjoyable to read, and this one is no exception. VERY well done! take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

I was thinking about paris, and the world really, more like a parents lament about keeping her children safe. Thanks for picking up on that l.

[dan]

It's always MY pleasure! take care...dan

[terry smith]

some things are out of your control

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you for the review

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow, I am blown away! I love thank it, thank you so much for the RR!!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. I wrote it from a mother point of view to the world.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Yeah, I can feel the motherly bond behind your words!