Wash me clean

In dusk's sultry pool
We shred the day's saltiness
And exchange Thier weight
For the buoyancy of
Each others embrace
Praying the ripples
We make tonight
Last in til the
The red of dawn's light

Reviews

[Julia Ledo]

Love the lines "Praying the ripples we make tonight". The ripples are echoes of movement, progress, some kind of impact and I love the way it fit into setting of "dusk's sultry pool". The whole use of water in this poem is lovely

[sinNsincerity]

Hoping it'll be anything but hopes...

[Philip Muls]

The ripples we make tonight, elegant wording. I like the poem, less is more, not a word too much.

[olyvia]

i love the imagery, this is great. i love how its sensual and romantic without one overpowering the other, perfect balance. i love this

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you!

[Not here]

great imagery in everything in this poem. i liked it :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you :)

[Melliflower]

I'm speechless. I tend to talk a lot when i review or reply. But this piece has left me speechless. I love the imagery of "dusk's sultry pool", mixing with the title of washing clean, and shedding the day's saltiness, then too with "praying the ripples". How all of these elements mix together makes me feel really warm. This is a wonderful piece, hold on to it closely.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you! I really enjoyed looking over your work.

[Tks]

Your metaphorical use of words does make the poem come alive, Crystal! It is a shame it had to end so early though...fine use of descriptive imagery to paint a vivid, dynamic picture for us readers!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you! I dont do well with long poems, i tend to lose my way in them.

[Emily]

'Last in til the
The red of dawn's light'

Love this line!!
Keep it up!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Emily

[dan]

Crystal, In spite of the dark overtones to this piece the love of which it speaks shines bright like the stars; you have a special something talent that seemingly allows you to throw Scrabble blocks into the air and have them fall in perfect arrangement, embraced in their entanglement. Such a beautiful write of love. take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Dan. I am always so flattered and humbled by your reviews

[terry smith]

You could write a grocery list and make it poetry :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. As I hold your work in high esteem i really appreciate your words.

[terry smith]

Thank you!! I am still trying to figure out if anything I write is really good or not,so thanks for the compliment :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

well in all honesty i am a bite of a snob when it comes to poetry and will only comment on those i like or feel like have potential. So i am honest when i say that you do have talent

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

well at least in my opinion ... whatever that means

[terry smith]

Thanks! :) and every ones opinion means something ! :)