Lies

Your words

Changed my mind

But not my soul

Untouched

Unscoured

by the lie you dangled like

carrots from your stick

like rhymes from your lips

You smile

than saunter on

All too aware of

the smolder you leave in your wake

I reach out and try to grab

the remains of sweet nothings

But am left nursing the tips

as your embered intentions

cool,

ash

than float away.   

Reviews

[Julia Ledo]

Love the smooth rhythm in this poem, it contrasts nicely with the actually fairly sharp words here.

[sinNsincerity]

I really enjoyed the shorter sentences. It gave me the feeling as if you are speaking to me.

[Perkele.7885]

Your poem is as smooth as the character that you write about I am impressed by the first poem that I have read by you. That is a good start.

[terry smith]

wow!! I really like the way you write!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. I added you :)

[terry smith]

Thanks!! :) I like to be able to read those I find have a unique voice,and there is something about yours!! I hope to read much more of your work in the future!! :)

[dan]

Crystal, Your style and maneuvering of words wrapped in feeling continues to amaze me. This piece is so good of conjuring a feeling inside me of importance, a soft yet palpable urgency. This goes into my library favorites, and I thank you for that! take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Dan! I really appreciate your reviews.

[Emily]

Very nice wording!
Keep it up!!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you for reading and i am so happy you liked it.

[AaronFreitas]

"Your words
Changed my mind
But not my soul"

You really set the tone for the rest of the poem with these deep, honest words. I loved it Crystal :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you! That means a lot coming from you

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks :) I got a compliment while complimenting you :)