douchbags

Once upon a time there was a girl just trying to get a taco from a taco truck... up comes prince not so charming ... the tale as old as time... only i am not the damsel in distress type...

Baited glances

and tinted smiles

your eyes measure my worth

by the weight of my stature.

 

With a weak logic

You figure better than nothing

And saunter up to me as if

MY sun needs

YOUR earth to survive

 

Foolish mortal

I am Venus

from my hips

to my breast

I am woman

So little boy

try your best

but be warned

I’ll put you

back where you belong

School. 

Reviews

[terry smith]

and Mars sits back and laughs...he knows better than to mess with the lady. I love this one!!! :)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

thank you it was fun to write.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

The ending word is priceless! Haha! And I am feeling and loving the attitude of the protagonist here. Strong, assertive, no-nonsense loving, and who can put any silly little person at their place. Very awesome and humoristic write!

[Jordan]

What if he just wanted to be nice and buy you a taco? People are like that. We spontaneously decide to do random acts of kindness. If someone offered to buy me food, Id be lying if I said I was okay with it but, I'd accept it.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Yeah the poems about more than a nice well meaning gentleman trying to by me a taco. Lol. It's about entitled men or women. Thanks for the read :)

[closed]

adamant
a very abrasive piece that challenges the cultural fairytale of the sexes

thanks for sharing it


-Dream

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. I love challenging fairy tales, and culture norms.

[Robert]

This is great, don't ever take any s**t from anyone. Strong and independent is POWER. Nicely said Crystal.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Robert!

[AaronFreitas]

I love this one! What a great idea to write about. Sometimes those experiences we have we can write about best since the emotion is attached to our words. Great piece :)

[Emily]

Good idea for a poem!
Well done!

[dan]

Oh Crystal...this is a GEM! "You...as if MY sun needs YOUR earth to survive." I'm going to have to plagiarize that line for one of MY earths. I almost felt sorry for the guy until I found myself on my feet clapping at my computer monitor. This write is super-special and it's going into my library favorites so I can copy/paste it into e-mail to friends and especially my son. The best of yours that I have read so far! take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you Dan! Yeah I really liked that line myself. I think this really shows my personality so i am super honored that you like it that much. Plagiarize with my permission friend.

[dan]

Of course I was joking. But imitation IS the sincerest form of flattery, so doesn't plagiarism fit in there somewhere. Great poem, GREAT line. thx...d

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

You dont need to plagiarism, your work is so original and awesome! I am soo happy to hear Dee is back and getting better!

[dan]

Thank you, but I'M the lucky one in this exchange. I got to have HER come home, she only got to come home to ME. On all judges' scorecards, I win. Thanks so much for your kind words. Next time I feel like fishing for compliments I know exactly where to go...Crystal Lake. take care...dan

[Not here]

:) i really liked that alot. great poem. LOL

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you! I has quickly become one my favorites.

[Not here]

agree to agree :)

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this is simply awesome... a genuine observation written very well... love the response to those weighing glances...douchbags, indeed...

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

Thank you. I actually had a great time writing this one.