Bleeding for tomorrow

a poem

I bleed it out
whats in my head
with great remorse
for those who're dead
yet walk around
with seeming ease
gently guided
by jaded breeze
and oh we walk
and oh we say
I thank you God
for this day
but in our hearts
with a guilt full sorrow
we know that

again tomorrow
we will sin
and never be
alive the way we were intended to be

Reviews

[Dani California]

"and oh we walk
and oh we say
I thank you God
for this day
but in our hearts
with a guilt full sorrow
we know that
again tomorrow
we will sin.."

This speaks for itself. Wow... there is so much truth in those lines that it took me aback for a second and made me think.... really really think.

This is a great poem... from beginning to end. It's message is very strong, and you've conveyed it creatively and perfectly, and with great flow...

Very well done! Thank you for this... :)

[_mal]

I love the flow of this, towards the middle especially. You see things clearly here

[shadadakiya]

that is because god is still molding us like a caterpillar in a cocoon one day in god's time we will evolve into what we are meant to be good work,happy holidays

[Albert Freeman]

This is a good poem. We're all definitely not who we want to be and sometimes find our selves doing things that we know we shouldn't do. Very nice.

nice and simple,

kept slim, a different format, not very popular, but a great format indeed.

you have good fundamentals.

For the message, it is relevant, and something enlightening. I like this piece.

A wonderful piece.

[Amanda]

there is much truth in this write....it causes me to think and wonder what is up with everyone around me. it would be easy to say that we are inherently predisposed to sin, but that is not entirely true....though some are remorseful and sorrowful, others are not. what is wrong with this picture?

a good write...i'll thank Michael for sending it to me.

Always,

Amanda

[Spoken]

I'm familar with the walking dead, I've felt like that time and time again... will we ever live to our potential? I don't know.. but one can only hope and keep walking one foot in front of the other. Well written my friend :)

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow I really like this piece!
Perfect flow!
Kudos!

[Norma J. Jessee]

How true these words are.One would be wise to ponder the message you have so wisely presented.
I must thank Michael for directing me to this beautiful heartfelt verse.
This is going to my favorites.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"again tomorrow
we will sin
and never be
alive the way we were intended to be"

This is such a fact of life and I agree with Dani that it speaks a lot with itself.
I always love to read thoughtful poems like this, conveying so brilliant thoughts!
Very raw and so full of emotions, Great work!

[Nely Amorim]

this is a very thoughtful and thought provoking poem i enjoyed reading it.