Barbed Wire

the trees threw away their load

from ground to peak

stepping with their roots

upon freedom

 

in the town where you left me

fences are coated in ice

I began to tremble

from outskirts towards center

my fingers clutching the wire

my smile electrocuted by tears

leaves slipping under my soles

like mummified love letters

 

I will eat many seeds this winter

until my buds will get tough

until branches will grow intertwined

up to my willow’s hollow

bowing over the fence

 

someday I shall pass on the other side

following our footprints

feeding doves from my hands

with fresh wheat germs

Reviews

[Sophie]

Wow! What an amazing poem. It is very sad but veyr good. The ending is great, I like the last verse. My favourite line us 'my smile electrocuted by tears' It is so sad but so good. It is sort of like a metaphor, showing pain through barb wire like 'electrocuted by tears' The flow was very good, the awkward parts were only very slight. A fantastic poem overall!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Thank you very much. Some memories are painful. When I had once a disillusion I was really clutching a net fence (it was not electrified) and I could not hold back my tears. It never happened to me before or after that moment. I believed it can be used as a metaphor.

[Sophie]

Sometimes you just have to let all that pain out, I know. I have had very personal experiences of my own.

[Marie]

Morphing into tree...leafing out of restraints...

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Indeed, hoping the impossible.