Youth Envy

A reflection on the intense nostalgia of youth.

Plump and flourescent skin
Eyes with bottomless wells of life
Scan this world without regret

Supple hearts that swell
With charcoal-filtered love
Strike strong against virgin chests

Ernest ears that hear only
Poetry and peace, perk to
The direction of their mother's whisper

Soft and stretching bones
Filled with sparkling marrow
Hold you proud against winds of change

And now this vicious cycle...
The endless slow-drain of
Night into light, light to night

With no spawn to live through
Nor lend my name to. And Why?
Because I've chosen to

Oh youth that I know so well
Laugh and burn with the passion of life!
For your path will merge mine soon enough

Author's Note

Comments gladly accepted.

Reviews

[kitty blur]

Your word choice gave me such nice visuals. I liked the rhythm that this poem had, too. I don't think the syllabic flow hiccuped at any point, which I can appreciate seeing as it's essentially the opposite of how I write. Funny how we both saw our differences to be cool and interesting instead of hating each others' work.

My favorite stanzas were the second and fourth ones. Charcoal-filtered love against virgin chests, bones filled with sparkling marrow... They're such excellent bursts of descriptions. So nice.

[Esteban Luis Soto]

Thank you so much, Kitty Blur! I appreciate your critique!

[LM]

I will quote you on this lol "Heck, I'm not even there yet and I've been doing it for 20 plus years now!" Not there yet my a*s! You're a brilliant writer. I can see it in every word, detail, and infliction. Very nice. It flowed as smooth as silk. I enjoyed this work of art very much! =)

[Esteban Luis Soto]

Ahh, LM, you made my morning with your review. You're too kind. Thank you so much!

[William Liston]

This is a very good poem. Your imagery and vocabulary were wonderful. You are a very skilled poet. Great job on this.

-William Liston

[Esteban Luis Soto]

Thank you so much, William. Sometimes we poets really need to hear things like this to validate our worth. Much appreciated.