My New Found Fantasy

This poem was one of the first that I wrote. It was about two years ago. I really hope that everyone enjoys it.

 

A fantasy no more

It seems

Reality has come this way

Fairies with wings

And vamps with fangs

All use to haunt my dreams

Now it seems they are always with me

Watching my every move

Every corner I turn

Every street that I cross

Their eyes following me

What do they want?

What do they need?

Are they protecting me

Or just waiting for

The perfect time

To make their move on me?

Positive spirits

Negative energies

What does this all mean?

Maybe you think

I am losing my mind

But for me...

A fantasy no more

It seems

Reality has come this way

Author's Note

My poems hardly ever rhyme, Do you think it flows well

Reviews

[dorkfish]

it flows really well, i would say the only part that gets just a little awkward is
"Are they protecting me
Or just waiting for
The perfect time
To make their move on me?"
the last two line just seem to get a bit long in reading to get the idea across but that is only when you compare them to the rest of the poem and how speedy you get those ideas across.
you did a very nice job with this and i cant wait until i can read some more of your work.

[Edalene Connell]

This is wonderful, and it flows great. Well done.

[poetic soul]

it flows really well.. i loved the change in the shades of life of good and evil as we call it to be.. a nice write.. i really enjoyed the read... :)

Smiles,
:)
Poetic Soul

[masie]

i love this... its like the fantasy word come to life. How the are secretly around if you look.
This poem flows very well... and i like the structure of it. and i like the emotion i of curiosity in this.
job well down hun.

[Flame DM]

Loved this! I could totally relate! I'm a phobic to the dark and I see these images all the time and it definately strung my emotions into the piece. You do good with being able to make a reader relate =] Two thumbs up!

[xX-tito24-Xx]

I love this poem! XD

And yes, as others have said, it flows beautifully, this poem seems like a mix of schizophrenia and neo-paganism, very interesting indeed!

Be assure, as soon as I finish typing this, I'm going straight to your profile to see any other works you might have on here...

Also, don't worry about not rhyming, not all poems do, and sometimes a rhyme scheme can restrict you in the message your trying to put forward.

[Liam]

The ending is awesome, and it flows very well. I liked it.

[Dimpe]

"Are they protecting me
Or just waiting for
The perfect time
To make their move on me?"

Eerie mind, I like it. I also think it flows very well. I don't like when rythem or meaning is compromosed for a rhyme.

[Mariah]

I agree that rhyming is never necessary if the poem is worth reading. Sometimes, I find that poems without rhyming are better.

But I think it flows wonderfully.

[Windy]

I thought you did a good job with the flow, the whole poem for that matter. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work. ;)