In Some Ways You�re Perfect (In Other Ways You're Not...)

Based on my recent events..

 

Early morning dawns as he pulls her near
Knowing he can’t stop her falling tears
It’s too late for him but too early for her
There should have been many more years…

They’re running through the motions
Of another fiery day
They’re crying and they’re laughing
Holding each others hearts…

She’s reaching out but falling fast
He’s the net to catch her heart
But deep inside she holds a thread
Like the silver lining of a cloud…

By frosted glass on a winters night
She stands by subtle candle light
A loving grasp and butterfly kisses
In some ways you’re perfect
In other ways you’re not…

Reviews

[HoWiE]

Hey there Morgan, welcome to the Cafe. Traditionally I'm not a poetic kind of guy but I did like this - I certainly liked the title 'In Some Ways You're Perfect (In Other Ways You're Not)' it catches the readers imagination and makes them want to read on - it's also another in a long line of break up lines I've had fired at me over the years: 'It's not you it's me', 'You're more like a friend / brother than a lover', 'I think we've grown apart', 'I hate you please leave' and 'For God's sake she is my sister!' (I'm kidding of course).

I liked this because it had a real sense of missed opportunity, things that should have been done weren't done, things that should have been said weren't said and so on. A nicely crafted piece of poetry, thanks for posting. Now I feel sufficiently depressed to leave the PC and wallow in coffee in front of the TV....
Looking forward to reading more of your work - Cheers!! Howie ;)

[siobhan]

"It's too late for him but too early for her"
favourite line :]


very good.

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

This is really good, hope i read more of this from you. : )
how long have you been writing poems?

i love it, its so beautifully sad, and the ending was great, because no one is ever perfect
great write
-ST