Am I Somebody or Myself?

Heroes fall,

Cowards prevail.

My kingdom crashes,

Dust blooming around me.

My world moves,

Changing who I am

Telling me to be someone I’m not

But why all this?

Why must I do this just to feel like I’m someone?

To not feel like I’m nobody,

Like I’m somebody?

This can’t all work,

I can’t just change how I dress,

What music I listen to,

How I talk

Who I hang out with.

I can’t change that

But what do I need to do to just feel like

I don’t know,

Myself?

Reviews

[Bluefire]

Confusion, hypnotic, eventful.
I like the word choice and the story to this.
Well played!

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks Bluefire!!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome!

[BelfastBhoy69]

PERSONAL, POWERFUL AND PROVOCATIVE! Well penned !

[Tina]

Wow, the first four line were very dramatic and enticing! This was wonderful, and something I'm sure many teens can relate to.

[613]

This had a potentially-powerful theme throughout. There were parts that came across a little cliche; but I believe, can be improved upon. Overall, great job!

- Brittney

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks Brittney!! This helps a lot!!!!

[613]

You're welcome. I look forward to reading more from you!

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks! I'll try to check out something of yours

[613]

Thank you!

[micky]

Wow powerful...i love this piece
Well done :)

[wordsofheart]

A thoughtful theme with an excellent use of interrogative sentences.One can can easily relate to evry part of it which makes it even more good to read.
And we can't please everyone.We just gotta be ourself cause only then we can present the best in ourselves and our talents.

[Warren Daniel II]

The poem asks a lot of questions which everybody should ask themselves once in a while about who they truly are and if that is how they are truly perceived by the world, great poem thanks for sharing.

[Mayank]

you have to be yourself, there are people that have problem me wearing black and band tee, they say my music is Satanic... and me, I just say one thing "you can f**k off"

[Nila M.]

The only constant in life is change but only when and if you want it. We are conditioned throughout our lives to "be" something, when most of us just want to be ourselves. The barriers and conditioning is more mental though than tangible. Thoughtful and true what you wrote. Thank you!

[KirstMind]

I enjoyed this read, could relate... Especially to "I can’t just change how I dress, What music I listen to" .
It's these things that make one stand out from the crowd and pose the unique factor. Well done.