Why Would You Walk Away

You walk away,

Leaving me crying in pain.

My blood glistens on your hand,

To match the blood on my face.

It looks as though it were painted.

My eye I know is swollen,

The blood and the bruise,

Mixing to a nasty shade of grey.

I can tell by looking in the mirror,

That you had been blocking only moments ago,

That my nose is broke,

For it’s all bent out of shape.

Your car starts up,

Pulling out of the driveway,

Leaving me to bask in my own blood,

From the cuts that you left

All over my body.

Reviews

[LonlyKitty]

I like how this poem explains everything yet you can't really understand anything. It's sad and beautiful. Great job :)

[Cool Girl]

This is sad. Really really sad. I love it, but it makes me want to cry. This is what love feels like...

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks!! lol I actually didn't know that it kinda sounded like what love feels like

[Cool Girl]

lol You're welcome!

[Lizardo]

Holy world, This is really dark and the ending really dark sad too
one dark piece of poetry, but it's very interesting to read too
Great poem!

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks! I don't think I followed a very good rhythm though.

[Lizardo]

But it's like a narrative poem, Makes you imagine the scene, Doesn't need to rhyme though
As long as you write what you feel its fine, take an example of my poems, they hardly rhyme xD

[Kyline Freed]

lol Thanks xD

[Matthew James Ginn]

rhythm was jarring, but thats okay. The whole thing is anyway
lol.

[Matthew James Ginn]

An interesting take on the malicious traits of humanity. Society could be the one that leaves you with scars. n expectation that changes who you are. In addition, I know many writers that have a gloomy voice in their writing. However, I am surprised to find that you make it work. Congrats, Keep up the good work.

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks! I actually wrote this thinking it was really bad but I let some friends read it and they said it was good so i put it on here. xD