Your Drug

This poem is about trusting the wrong people and things happening.

You stand and watch me fall,
The life coming right out of my eyes,
As though you are draining it out yourself.
I’m sprawled out on the ground,
My body’s convulsing,
You’ve given me your drug,
And your drug is what I fell for,

Your drug is what killed me.

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Trusting? or loving the wrong people? a really evil case of heartbreak. Correct? or just feeling used, or being stabbed in the back by someone you trust. Or all of it. Well done.

[Thesecuts]

Wow, I loved this. It came from the heart I can tell. you are so, so gifted.

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks so much for the review Hsanderzz!

[Thesecuts]

no problem I seriously did love this. Noone can compare to this writing piece because it's perfect and imperfect at the same time.

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks!! I honestly didn't think this poem was very good

[Thesecuts]

it's short but it's not simple at all. it's amazing.

[Lizardo]

Wow this is deep Kyline! and also kind of dark
Did like the last par though, It gave the poem a shocking endind
Love your work,
Good job on this one!

[Jamie]

Very dark and a very good piece of work! great job!

[DoormanDan]

I like the darkish atmosphere of this poem! It's a shame that a lot of good people do end up trusting the wrong people in this world, and you really put that into perspective with this poem! Keep sharing your writing with the world!

[Seth Armstrong]

Short, sweet, and simple. Well, maybe not so sweet, but still, it's an overall good short poem that gets accomplished what it came for. I like it!

[SonOfaSailor]

I really like this, the idea behind it seems very deep. I would love to see it in some sort of rhyme scheme (even free-verse). Words that rhyme can sometimes lose their dark touch, but I think you have the ability to retain that edge

[Kyline Freed]

Thanks SonOfaSailor! I just got bored in science after my final and wrote this, it didn't go through any editing or revising because I couldn't think of anything to change >.

[SonOfaSailor]

No problem:) keep ona writing!