I miss you

I gently touched the lining of her frame

And like brittle oak leaves under a hot summer sun,

She crumbled to the ground. She faded from my mind like

A simmering mirage in a Sahara desert.

If only I had one last minute to hold her in my eager arms,

So now I tread carefully; I dare not trample

On the broken dreams that we tried to build.

Your image is in every tear,

Your image is in every thought,

Your image is soldered to my heart.

Oh no, you’re my heart, I am you.

I have crafted so many images of you,

That my mind has forgotten what you look like.

But my heart and soul have made you part of me.

And now you are gone, I’m ripped apart,

Like an unborn baby from its mother’s womb.

Depression, subjected to the wailing of the world,

Has made me mad as a hatter.

I sink like the Titanic in cold frosty water,

Losing every bit of soul, my precious cargo,

The weight that makes me whole.

I cannot exist with dead weight, lounging,

Taking the space that you crafted,

That you, that we forged in an eternal flume of love

Your presence is not the necessity of your love

We love each other through our souls

Through the earth and the cosmos, stretching out along the Milky Way.

In my love for you I will die a thousand deaths

As the lord forgives us a thousand fold,

I will continue to love you

And live in every moment that proclaimed our love.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. I think you went a little heavy on the imagery in places, but for the most part, you've told the story well. I don't much like the title as it feels a bit simple, but that's a minor issue. Good work.

[Créatif Word]

Thanks Trigorin. By the way, i didn't know that one could over do the "imagery" lol. I appreciate you reading.