Onlookers join in
Swaying with the rhythm
Mimicking the pioneers
In the quest for excellence
you revealed an eternal truth :)
very good write :)
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Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thanks for your time and wonderful review. I appreciate it.
Wow. It really amazed me. The rhythm in this poem is neat and clear, and the words used are really beautiful.
The title is well-chosen also. I like how you view dancing as contagious. The word itself expressed the theme very lively and extraordinary.
I really enjoy reading your poem.
Thank you for sharing! :)
Kami
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you for your insightful review. I highly appreciate your time and review.
I love that you included the onlookers in this poem, that they went out to find their own happiness. I think that added a great spin to this poem and I thought it had a great flow.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you for your lovely review. I appreciate it.
The title itself draws my attention. Dance is one of the best ways to express happiness and love. Dance is contagious. This poem is really good. There is no rhyme scheme but there is rhythm.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you for your lovely feedback Khushi. I highly appreciate it.
Dance is a beautiful subject to write poetry on, and so is love. Thank you for expressing the feelings of two dance partners in love. Iloved this poem! :-)
When you see someone dance so passionately, you can't help in wondering, how their love is so contagious, as if you wanted also to dance with your special someone. Every thing falls into place when the feelings of both lovers connects, and dance the rhythms of love. Very nice piece.
Firstly, dance and love are synonyms as per my own theory.
You can imagine a relationship which is very free and flows like a feather just like a young, Contemporary dancer taking a flight from easy soft landing feets. What a gracious moment.
Now, could you even relate a tough time of relationship with a dance form "CRUMPING"; aggressive offensive.
How many stories you carve Praveeta, I think with the least of words ever used for them.
I am in love with this approach that you have used.
Thanks for sharing
Stay blessed!!
Prodical
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your insightful review. I do appreciate your time and effort in reading and re.. read moreThank you so much for your insightful review. I do appreciate your time and effort in reading and reviewing my piece.
Wov,I really liked the way u expressed the concept.I think its about dancing, right?
The last line is like...its like the last line has succeeded in its quest of excellence in the field of last lines.
...I can't say its the best but I LIKE IT.
The Magic Faraway Tree has been my favourite book and I remember how I missed school for a day to be truly immersed in the imaginary world that Enid Blyton had beautifully created.
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