Cloak

Cloak

She smiles
She giggles
She covers it all
No one notices her misery at all

Deep within she is hurt
But does not regret
One day her pain will be gone
That day she will be reborn

Author's Note

Just crafted this now. Please feel free to comment.

Reviews

[Kami Grace]

The title matches perfectly with the poem. By acting, she cloaks her pain with false smiles... Very sad and beautiful.
In the first stanza, the words are so simple, yet that is all we do to deceive other people that we are okay. "Smiles", "giggles", these reflect reality so much that I really feel the pity and sadness behind the poem.
What makes the poem really stand out is that the hope in the future. She will recover from her pain, and get a new life. I felt that strong message to every part of my body.
Very well-written, thank you for posting it! :)

Kami

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your insightful review. Highly appreciate it.

[Ahena MK]

Awesome rhyme and meaning.... Wonderfully crafted... Love your short and sweet write ups... Awesome talent
Ahena :)

[Praveeta]

Thank you for your beautiful review.

[-Scribe in Style-]

Very well expressed! Simple, yet full of emotion and meaning.
It very well describes the character of the women and the 'Cloak' title is appropriate in emphasis of the way she is currently feeling.

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your time and review. I appreciate your input.

[ZeniaK]

The thing I like most about this poem is that it isn't just about suffering, but about the hope that one day she WILL be better and that the heartbreak won't last forever.

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your insightful review. I appreciate it.

[Half Dream]

Beautifully penned! I love the way you started and you ended it! I can feel the pain and also the hope in this piece! Awesome ink! :)

[Praveeta]

I am thankful for your insightful review.

[Half Dream]

My pleasure. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Like a Phoenix she will rise from the ashes of the fire...Bravo..........

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your time and review. Highly appreciate it.

[Sami Khalil]

Highly welcome...:)....................

[PoetryPenPal]

This poem is beautiful. I enjoyed it alot.

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your review. I am glad you enjoyed it.

[The Invisible Girl]

You conveyed her emotion very well in just a few words. Such a beautifully written poem!! Keep it up! :)

[Praveeta]

Thank you for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it.

[Arialti]

Hi Praveeta,
This is beautifully written. I can actually feel her emotions. :)

[Praveeta]

I am glad that you felt it :) Thanks for your review.

[captain]

I like how hopeful this piece is, it reminds me of myself. To have known that there will be a time, that I will walk in the path of light, and not all darkness that I see from time to time. It is simply beautiful. I remember a quote my friend told me: "SOMEONE WHO ALWAYS SHOWS THEIR HAPPY SIDE TO PEOPLE IS THE MOST LONELIEST". and He is right on that. very nice work!

[Praveeta]

Thanks for your time and for your inspiring comments. I really appreciate it.

[captain]

you are most welcome.