Dancing with Death

Inspired by The Book Thief

Every day,
I dance with death.

He holds me close,
And I feel his presence.

Every day,
He guards my dreams.

I dance with death
For eternity.

Author's Note

This was written after watching The Book Thief..

Reviews

[james miles]

wow...I really love this!!!

[Cool Girl]

Thanks :) :)

[Stephen]

Nice...short and sweet but packed with meaning. thanks for sharing

[Cool Girl]

Thank you so much! :)

[wordman]

i guess we all do cool girl,probally don`t even know it

[Cool Girl]

Very true..thanks, wordman :)

[Not here]

thats great and very spooky :)

[Cool Girl]

Thanks! :)

[costa siwale]

Oh! Chilly..I love the theme of death. And I love your poem.

[Cool Girl]

Thank you :) :) :)

[costa siwale]

Anytime Cool

[Maddy Stillman]

Great theme, I like the simplicity of it. As others mentioned it's a bit short -- I think you could definitely work this into a longer and more sensory piece. I could easily see more details in each stanza -- his presence, you could bring more to the reader's sense of touch. Talk about what death's presence feels like, physically and emotionally. I love the third stanza: "he guards my dreams". Great perspective -- the lingering of death could very likely prohibit what you pursue. Overall, I really like it, and I see lots of potential :)

[Cool Girl]

Thanks! I'll definitely update it once I make a longer version! :)

[Lizardo]

Simple but very relevant
Great work CG

[Cool Girl]

Thanks, Lizardo!!

[Bluefire]

Pretty good. I like that book, got halfway through before I lost it =c
Kinda short but well done!

[Cool Girl]

Thanks! I'm trying to make it longer, but currently have a bit of writers block :)

[Bluefire]

I hate when that happens. Good luck!