Days Without You

This is very depressing..

"It isn't your fault!"

That is what you said.

They tore us apart,
They ripped out our hearts.

But no matter what,
I kept loving you.

I kept thinking and thinking,
Wishing and wishing.

I told myself lies.

I guess I'm the liar and the victim.

But that is not important.

Here are the days,
The days without you.

Wednesday,
I cried myself to sleep.

Thursday,
I dreamt of your handsome face.

Friday,
I did it again.

Saturday,
I did it again.

Sunday,
I prayed for your health.

Monday,
They found me lying dead.

And on went the world
Doing their crazy things.

You were the only one
Who seemed to remember me.

Tuesday,
You found out,

Wednesday,
You cried.

Thursday,
You screamed my name.

Friday,
You died.

And on went the world,
Doing their crazy things.

And there was no one left,
To remember you or me.

Author's Note

Sorry, I got depressed...

Reviews

[613]

This is a very depressing piece. However, it was written quite well. You should be proud of yourself!

- Brittney

[Cool Girl]

Thank you, Brittney :)

[613]

You're welcome!

[Perkele.7885]

How do you know all of this if you have passed? This is one poem that need not have happened with a little more communication. Do you agree or not with me. Lives are valuable things.

[Cool Girl]

Lives are very valuable things.. I guess you could know it all by watching from Heaven..

[wordman]

lord girl you depressed me,a great write

[Cool Girl]

wow thank you!! :) your reviews are always so nice

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow this is an incredible and powerfully dark piece of writing!!!!!!!!!

[Cool Girl]

Thank you :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Your welcome!!

[Tom McRoberts]

The listing of days and there contents make it seem almost like a diary, as a result it feels very personal and human. Again you've captured pain well, I hope it's not something you experience too much of though. Keep it up!

[Cool Girl]

Thank you so much! I wouldn't necessarily call it pain that I experience, I'd call it sadness. I tend to write my emotions down. It helps me to let it all out. Thanks again though! Take care :)

[Rajat malik]

They say, don't cry coz it's over but smile coz it happened but how can someone smile if he had lost the reason for it......# u left me lamented #amazing.......u rock yaar

[Cool Girl]

Thanks so much!!!!!!!!! :)

[Cool Girl]

Thanks so much!!!!!!!!! :)

[Rajat malik]

U r welcome #always

[luvs2write]

Sometimes the most beautiful things are sad and bittersweet. That being said, I feel like this was a beautiful piece of writing. It was sad, haunting, maybe a bit dark....but it was very well written. I liked it.

[Cool Girl]

Thank you very very much :)

[closed]

I wont let anything take you from me

you have my promise


fear nothing my love


-my Queen of dreams

[Cool Girl]

Okay.. I shall not fear

[closed]

then i'm glad my rose

we have to remember

''perfect love casts out all fear''

(kisses)

[Cool Girl]

Yes..

Love requires you to be strong

[AaronFreitas]

Damn what a sad story my friend... you told it very well... I could picture myself at each scene. Good work :)

[Cool Girl]

Thanks, Aaron!

[....................]

A very sad write but so beautifully written. It's always hard to read these sad poems and call them beautiful - such a conundrum. But you lay your heart open and let it out on paper. Great job Cool Girl

[Cool Girl]

Thank you so much, FT. I really appreciate your reviews :)

[....................]

You are kindly welcome young lady :)