Danger Lerks

This is my first attempt at writing a horror poem

In the dead of night
You toss and turn
Hoping you will crash and burn.
But no matter how hard you try
You still continue to lie
wide awake in your bed,
Staring at the ceiling.
All of a sudden,
You have a creepy feeling.
You feel that something isn't right
and it scares you especially in the dead of night.
There's no lights on
everything is pitch black.
You wish you could get your warmth back.
But as you lie there, the feeling increases
the fear runs through you and you grab the creases of your sheets.
No matter what you try to do
This fear isn't escaping you.
Then you almost cry out
for what was that sound?
It sounded like a man's boot
walking on the ground.
Ever so slowly, ever so surely
Ever so deliberately.
One step
Then another.
You try to hide beneath your covers.
But then, did you imagine it?
Was it in your head after all?
Yes, you try to think
but you feel like your downfall is ever slowly approaching.
Then you hear again, in the pitch black around you.
You feel fear and terror
as more darkness surrounds you.
Maybe if I turn on a light, you think,
this will all go away.
So you tiptoe, noiselessly and reach to the light switch near the doorway.
But try as you might, it won't turn on.
For the lights stopped working
Now your fear is strong.
Then all of a sudden,
your breath runs cold,
for standing in the corner,
behold, behold!
Tis the shaddow of a man,
and his intentions don't look good
He's not behaving like a normal man should.
Then on the wall before you,
You want to scream at the sight.
For smeered in blood is your name in the dead of night.
You are frozen in terror as you see the man move closer.
Then the sound of metal
you almost scream with horror.
But is this all a dream, you hope.
Am I going bananas?
But then the hair on your neck stands on end
As the man approaches you, daggar in hand
Then whispers softly
It's time to meet your fate, Staceyanna.

Author's Note

Thanks so much for reading. I usually don't write horror poems, mostly it's horror stories. But I figured I would give this a shot. Please let me know what you think. And of course, any grammar of misspelling if you notice them. Thanks much.

Cheers,

Staceyanna

Reviews

[Jennie Baron]

This is a very suspenseful, creepy, scary write indeed.

A few spelling errors:
lerks should be lurks
shaddow s/b shadow
smeered s/b smeared
daggar s/b dagger

But of course those are small things and easily corrected and overall, and this is very good especially for a first attempt at a horror poem. Very well done!

[Stacey]

Wow thank you so much for taking the time to read/review. Also thanks for bringing the spelling errors to my attention. Interesting about shadow, I thought it was with 2 D's. Guess not though. Anyway, thanks again.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

"smeered" is the only typo I found. (Smeared)
I think this is an original bit of writing. I would just arrange the lines so that the rhymes are all lined up at the end. It might flow a little better for the reader that way, I think. Then again, I'm not a poetry expert.
But I did enjoy it. Thanks for posting.

[Chris]

The use of Lerk in the title was a unique choice... and could have been very apropos but you kept referring to the creature as a "man". So I guess you might have meant "Lurk" instead?

"Daggar" another unique and appropriate word - well used.

[Stacey]

Thank you so much for the review. I'm honestly not sure. I thought it was spelled lerk, but I'm probably wrong. Thank you for telling me.

Cheers,

Staceyanna

[Chris]

Lerk is in the "Urban" dictionary - Small flying creatures that are capable of emitting lethal spore clouds. Lerks can usually be found residing in ventilation ducts, especially ones located near human quarry. While annoying on their own lerks can be quite dangerous when teamed up with their more powerful brethren, such as the fade or the onos. Chuckling here... it would have made for a meaning-full rite all on its own.

[Stacey]

Wow, I did not know that. Thanks for telling me. I will go back and fix that in the title.