Forever Love, Forever?

It is a Twilight Series based poem.

Forever Love, Forever?

 

He promised her forever.

To love her until the very end.

When he’ll stop caring is never,

But how long can he pretend?

She gave him her heart.

A promise to stat true.

She knows the start,

But if asked will he say ‘you’?

Night is what plagues him.

While she sees his light shine through,

She sees his light becoming dim,

But did he have a clue?

Their love is eternal, but only he will remains.

Will he let her pass or make the change?

Author's Note

umm..this is one of my first poems. Please comment on it. I would love to hear your toughts, suggestiongs & constuctive critism.

Reviews

[Emza S]

I like it, but there were a few words that I didn't know.

I think you really captured the whole Edward Bella thing. I wrote a poem about New Moon. I'd love it it you read it.

You should keep writing, because you really have potential, and a lot of talent. Ignore it if anyone says otherwise. Remember, keep writing.

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I love it! It totally fits the whole twilight situation. Iv'e wrote many poems on twilight so you can check the few i have postted. Keep on writing because you have talent!

[Writing.Bella]

omg! I love it!

[lauren emily]

Very nice! This poem is great! The flow is nice, and it's great how you seemed to put all the emotions in Twilight in this one poem.
Keep up the great work,
~Lauren