Tired Of You

A poem about the true story of two 115 year old tortoise who hated each other and got a divorce.

I'm tired of you
Tired of looking at your face
You're all up in my space
We've spent a century together
It seems like forever
We got nothing to say
Except to say how's the weather
I've been wondering
How to flip over my shell
So I can go to hell
But I'll probably see u there as well
You used to be nice
Then you started to bite
Please get out of my sight
I don't know what I saw in you
A century ago
You used to be cute
Now you make me wanna puke
So we're trapped in a zoo
With nothing to do
Our love has run its course
Now I want a divorce
It's time that we separate
I already have another date
Don't make me late
Just sign the papers
And we'll be on our way
After a 115 years
We are finally free
Cuz I was so tired of you

Author's Note

http://www.onegreenplanet.org/news/115-year-old-tortoise-marriage-ends-in-divorce/

Reviews

[Debbie_Philly]

Great flow and rhyme...great slam piece !!

[Celestial Witch Child]

Very random. Funny and depressing all in one.

[K-mo]

wow, that's a lot of hate in just one poem, but the flow was really good and the rhyme scheme as well. You are really good at painting a picture with your words

[外人 (Gaiji..]

ahahahahahah, sorry but i couldn't stop laughing figuring out tortoises like a human couple got sick of each other looking for a divorce, well i really have to compliment you for the following things (you DEFINITELY mastered them):
- Flow, words simply slid from my mouth
- Metrica, it was exactly the way it should have been to make reading light and enjoyable
. Empathy, of course you're not a tortoise but you did a great job representing their hypothetical feelings

[Ama May Cooper]

A very strong and powered piece filled with hatrid and resentment for the other person, good story , funny in a way and i like the odd choice of turtles.
Only thing i have to critise is that some of the rhyming feels a litte forced in parts, like you wrote the poem around the ryhme rather than the other way round making t seem less than it could be, but otehrwise beautifully done. Nice work

[ROSALIND]

WOW such a strong feeling of resentment and bitterness Let me go .....
but a well written piece of work

[GunMetal]

Just a couple of corrections:
site => sight
"So we're trapped in [a] zoo"

I can't not see this being said by a tortoise in some sort of tortoise sitcom. Entertaining as always.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I see a lot of anger in this piece, which i am assuming you are trying to get across. That is always good. We need to get it out. After 5 years of not writing any poetry all i have written if blogs of feelings. Keep up the feelings we need to to feel, to relate, and right now I can feel you on this piece. The pain is what we need to feel to be alive, no matter how much it hurts.