Letter To Keira Knightley

Keira Knightley and Nicole Richie
Used to be nice and plumpy
and now they're both skinny and skrawny

Mary Kate and Ashley Olson
Used to be so wholesome
and now the wind can blow them

What is happening to today's world?
When every child want's to be a skinny girl?
They eat a lil food then want to hurl

Little girls look up to their stars
They want to be skinny just as they are
So they refuse to eat then starve

I had a girl that thought she was too fat
but her small blubber was fun to grab
but she didn't want to hear that

Spain made their models to gain some weight
To join the catwalk the girls have to eat cake
A whole chicken they just ate

If Marilyn Monroe was alive
she would not be a model
They will tell her to go away and not even bother

Too many girls want to be super thin
I don't want to make love to a stick
So each girl must look from within

Is your beauty worth dying for?
You are starting to look like Skelator
I hope you start eating some more

So this is my letter to Keira Knightley
I am asking very politely
My hopes on her gaining weight is unlikely

She is now just skin and bones
What is wrong with her skin tone?
She looks like a ghost

I mean what is wrong this?
She looked like she came from the abyss
Oh the old her how much I miss

Reviews

[Alicia]

This is great poem on a subject that not to many people touch on. It's such a tough thing for many girls, and it's sad to see so many young celebrities influencing other young girls to starve themselves as well. This was poem was simple and easy to read, with even a touch of irony and humor, which I think works well. It is such a dark subject... the humor brightens it up a bit and makes it easier for people to understand the truth about it. Thanks for writing this, it is refreshing to hear a male's perspective on the subject. (I don't know why I'm assuming you're a man, but I can't really tell since your name is "Notorious Reviewer", so if I'm wrong, I'm sorry and please correct me :D).

[Raef C. Boylan]

You've dealt with Fat Goth Chicks, and now Skinny Celebrity Chicks. No one is safe! Lol.

I like how you have a few irregularly-rhyming stanzas amongst the AAA, BBB etc. ones.
However, the stanza starting "Too many girls want to be super thin...", because it goes ABA, it interrupts the flow (the Marilyn Monroe verse does a little as well, but that one works ok, maybe because they're half-rhymes, not exact rhymes). If you switched the seond and third line (re-wording the last line slightly e.g. "Each of them must look from within"), it would be an AAB, like the other irregular ones.
Man, that's a lengthy explanation.! Sorry 'bout that.

I think this stanza needs some work:
"Spain made their models to gain some weight
To join the catwalk the girls have to eat cake
A whole chicken they just ate" - a lot of the others are silly/funny, but still make a good point; the purpose of that last line seems to be rhyming only. Is there maybe something else you could add to this instead of just naming a second thing that Spanish models are eating?

In the first two stanzas, "use" should be 'used'...even if it's that way because of slang, i reckon you could change it, to avoid distracting (pedantic-like-me) people right at the beginning of your poem. Just a suggestion.

It's amusing, but still makes some good points. As always, you avoid being taken completely seriously, with your jokey tone...but the topic of this is so relevant, people are still picking up on your concern.
Nice job.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Girls girls girls... listen UP! This is REALITY calling. Us guys DONT LIKE BONES! The message is got across here very well.

[Jack Crowley]

I agree with Annie Mac (considering that I AM her ex-boyfriend) But this is very good work I like that it is strait to the point, but not to straightforward, if that makes any sense.

[{Angel Redd}[Formerly A..]

I had a girl that thought she was too fat
she felt good to touch as a matter of fact
but she didn't want to hear that


You sound like my ex-boyfriend...but i like this piece, it's really casual.

[Marie]

I agree completely. Great job!

[Brianna Brie]

Is your beauty worth dying for?
You are starting to look like Skelator
I hope you start eating some more

This was a sensible but humorous way to address eating disorders. Thanks for your voice. Enjoyed the read!

[October]

I completely agree! I think the new generation will starve themselves to death because girls keep wanting to be skinner and skinner. Great poem.
-October

[The Lovely Sound Of Cra..]

Is your beauty worth dying for?
You are starting to look like Skelator
I hope you start eating some more

Although there is humor in this piece, it's actually has a very important message. I agree that many girls now-a-days are so concerned with being skinny that they do ridiculous things to their body that puts them in danger.

This was a really good write, one that is very informative and opens up others eyes. I honestly don't see anything wrong with a little meat on girls. I actually prefer them that way. I'd rather have a huggable girl then one whom was so bony that they would break if I squeezed them.

Great job Reviewer. :)

[Lucky Me]

I like it good message. It is so hard for people to get it. No matter how many times young girls hear "it's ok to look like you do" they don't hear it. I didn't hear it and sometimes still don't. I live in California where the image of confidence is more of a priority. It is hard to not compare yourself, to say it's ok, when it doesn't feel ok. But I like where you're going with this. GET CURVY GIRLS ON TV.

[L. Jane English]

Mr. Reviewer, thank you for taking up this topic! Especially coming from a male- it's fantastic. Because so many girls don't realize that guys don't want string bean girls, they want a healthy, strong girl.

Here are my suggestions:

Mary Kate and Ashley Olson
Use to be so I would add a word here for to keep the meter* wholesome
and now the wind can blow them

*you could use 'somewhat' instead of 'some' except that would reduce your original feeling that they were always wholesome.

I had a girl that thought she was too* fat
she felt good to touch as a matter of fact
but she didn't want to hear that

*So was she fat? Because if she wasn't fat in your view, you might want to nix "too."

Thanks for writing about this!