Girl/Boy Chat

A Boy meets a girl who wants to chat with at the bar.

   INT. BAR - NIGHT

               Boy walks up to hot girl he sees at the bar.

                                   BOY
                         Hey

                                   GIRL
                         Hey.

                                   BOY
                         What's up?

                                   GIRL
                         Nothing much ...and you?

                                   BOY
                         Nothing just chilling.

                                   GIRL
                         Ok.

                                   BOY
                         May I buy you a drink?

                                   GIRL
                         I'm already drinking.

                                   BOY
                         Oh....well..may I buy you another
                         drink.

                                   GIRL
                         If you want to.

               The boy tries to get the attention of the bartender. The
               bartender ignores him.

                                   BOY
                         Excuse me....uh.....excuse me. Huh.

               He turns his attention back to the girl.

                                   BOY (CONT'D)
                         So uh....what do you do...?

                                   GIRL
                         What do I do?

                                   BOY
                         I mean. Uh what do you do..for fun?

                                   GIRL
                         Uh...well. I like to go out. Uh...

                                   BOY
                         Ok cool. Well.....I like to party.

                                   GIRL
                         Ok.

                                   BOY
                         Yeah.....

               The bartender finally comes by.

                                   BOY (CONT'D)
                         Excuse me. I would like a Sam Adams
                         and my friend would like uh...

                                   GIRL
                         Water.

                                   BOY
                         Yeah....she wants water.

               The bartender gives the Boy a Sam Adams beer and gives the
               Girl a glass of water. The Boy gives money to the bartender.
               He doesn't give tip.

                                   BOY (CONT'D)
                         So uh....what is your job?

                                   GIRL
                         I'm a student.

                                   BOY
                         Aw....ok. What are you studying?

                                   GIRL
                         Law.

                                   BOY
                         Law?

                                   GIRL
                         Yeah.....

                                   BOY
                         That's cool.

                                   GIRL
                         And what about you? Are you in
                         school? Or do you work?

                                   BOY
                         Uh....I'm in between jobs right
                         now.

                                   GIRL
                         So you're unemployed then.

                                   BOY
                         Uhhhhh....yeah....

                                   GIRL
                         Ok.

                                   BOY
                         Yeah.

               The girl's boyfriend comes by.

                                   GIRL'S BOYFRIEND
                         Hi hun. Sorry I'm late.

               The girl and her boyfriend kiss.

                                   GIRL
                         It's ok. I've been entertained by
                         this fine gentleman.

               The boy feels worthless.

                                   BOY
                         Hi.

                                   GIRL'S BOYFRIEND
                         We should go.

                                   GIRL
                         Bye. Thanks for the water.

               The girl and her boyfriend leave the bar. Boy is left by
               himself drinking a beer. He eyes another girl who would like
               to speak to.

               THE END.

Reviews

[Audrie]

way cool and so true. We are all aimlessly going throug life wishing and hoping to intmitely connect with someone - anyone - and I think that drinking makes it easier to lower your standards thus making it easier to find that connection even if it isn't authentic, real and true. The desperate need of finding companionship screws up our ability to decipher the difference between deep connections with people and shallow ones.

[zendikar]

very interesting simple yet deep i like it!

[Gandré]

Well, so it goes. haha am I not a nice girl, when I don't let anyone to buy me a drink? I mean, here they are quite possessive, after they buy a drink and I wonder your girl - character - didn't feel obliged...perhaps because she knew soon is there her boyfriend to protect her, if something. I liked this but isn't it a bit short? and I missed some exciting twist.. perhaps something like she spills his beer on her blouse and he offers to driver her to his home where she could clean it and dry it quickly and how she would be irritated by his artworks on his walls in the apartment and then they would come back very fast and then her boyfriend is finally there but she still has the pretty unusual artworks on her mind.. and she has to think them for he would paint just autumn pictures and everything looks like dying... and sad still life arrangements and how she now has a problem.. for those pictures and this guy would not go out of her head... aww I would like it you prolong this piece.. bitte bitte. great work, BTW... this speaks to everyone and nice artwork - by whom? By you? Latino society.. really great artwork..

[Patrica Alvarez]

Wow, i just came home from a club and this seems so very familiar. It's always odd to speak to someone that you don't know. I know i have problems talking to strangers in situations like that

[Kairi_Lynn]

well that certinally wasn't a break from monontany. I really didn't like this, you made it seem way to bland, your charaters didn't even really have personallity. you might have wanted to try a different way for the guy to talk to her rather than trying to avoid the inevitable pick up line that should have been in there. it was easy to read as it was to understand but I nearly fell asleep reading it. I'm sorry but this was not the best Iv'e ever read from you.

[George Love]

Seen this happen a few times. Glad I am not in that scene any longer. That's really about right, but so many go about meeting people the wrong way and have not got the right people skills!

[Rachel Koepke]

very typical,......very funny

[Dead Angel]

lol, men, they never know when to give up. This is a very interesting piece, easy to read and almost everyone can relate to this. I do admire the boy not let that incident ruin his night. very well done, i like how there were no pick up lines used here. No matter how smooth or suave the guy is, pick up lines are always cheesy and foolish. well done :D

[Killer]

Very very weird even for you cuz.But hey its a good thing the boyfriend came along.I think that boy is never going to get the change.

[Ama May Cooper]

Haha sounds like a rather good reinactment of the akward wanting words.
Cute , querky an amusing a great job there x