Pretty and Damaged

A poem about crazy pretty girls :)

She's a pretty and damaged girl

Everyone revolves around her world

She's a succubus in disguise

We believe in her lies

I thought she was in love with me

I guess it was not meant to be

She was in love with him

After she was done with me

I thought I was her savior

She wanted me to save her

She told me about her life

And how many times she cried

It made me feel sad

I wanted to be her dad

She said I was the only one

who made her feel as one

But she only wanted to have fun

Then afterwards we were done

She said the same thing to the next guy

I told him that its all lies

He cannot see the Succubus in disguise

I looked into his eyes

He's already under the spell

She gets away with it

because she's pretty as hell

She's a pretty and damaged girl

we revolve around her world

 

 

 

Author's Note

It's not a personal poem.

Reviews

[Lucky Me]

Nice pic to go w/ this. You never fail to have an eye for photos. :). I like this one. From the "damaged girl" s perspective let me say this: Yes we may be thought of as beautiful, and told we an rule the world, but sometimes, maybe just sometimes all we ever wanted was to be a child. To not be damaged. The sad part of this poem isn't the damaged girl. It is her inability to cope w/ her issues.

[Avoiry]

It is all about the game that can be played. A toy and twist of words and emotions . The picture is wonderful as it conveys the same vibe as the girl in the poem. The girl seems to recognize that there is something wrong but in the end she has to keep running so it doesn't catch up to her. Nice Piece.

[Luna]

Wow. This is a beautiful poem and many people can really relate to it.
Just by reading your descriptions, I feel as if I know this girl somehow. Your characterization, even for a short poem, is just great!

"She gets away with it
because she's pretty as hell
She's a pretty and damaged girl
we revolve around her world"

Great job with this. And, I like the picture.

-Luna

[Stephanie]

So true. Beautiful people (men or women) totally mesmerize for the sole purpose of hurting you. It might not be their fault, as you suggested, and that makes it all the more sad. You have amazing insight as usual.

[Bethany Woody]

Hey who gave you permission to write my biography? Only kidding a little. Thats pretty bad that I can see myself in this, or rather who I use to be before I grew up.

It's a really good piece. I love the word succubus, thought I was the only one who used it. It's one of those ones that makes you think of magical, ancient times, and mystical beings. Sad that there are really girls/women in the world who have this kind of life. It takes a lot to grow up adn out of it and only a few really manage to do it well.
The rhyme was a little off in parts, but I think it astill works okay, other then that good job.

[theperfectfit]

Those types are always gonna be around, gotta keep an eye out. Damaged girls? Damaged boys? They're the ones that damage people.

Good work! :D

[Kelley]

Hey isn't that Nikki's Sixx's girlfriend??? LOL
I always like reading your work. Keep up the great writing.

Kelley

[Victoria Harlequin]

Those "pretty and damaged" women are so ridiculous.
I like this poem, plenty of truth, the rhyming was good too.

[MeiAngelus]

I wish it was though. A personal poem. I mean you could insert a lot of girls, myself included, pictures. Oh, you made me cry. Story of my life. It's amazing because you felt so much even at your male perspective... if only there were more.

[just is]

This is so freaking awesome! I like the attitude you have penned out here, this iis sad as well as true, wonderfully written write.

[Monday Parker]

Ah those damaged women... I don't think that type will ever stop...Ugg this really pulled on my heart for the men that this woman sucks in... There is a long line of despair following her where ever she goes. Injuring men so that after her no woman they will trust. What a shame. Great freaking poem. Very well written�.