Conversations End With Hello

A poem inspired by a crappy last night.

Alone in a party
While everyone else is acting gnarly
I stay alone in a corner
While everyone else
is in mid-convo
It sucks being Anti-social
While everyone else
Is so vocal
I'm alone in my world
While it's hard to talk to a girl
I walk up and say hey
They act like I ruined their day
I don't know what to do
How do people walk up
And start a conversation?
No one cares what I'm saying
I'm contemplating
While am I still here
No one wants to hear
What I have to say
So why do I stay
Conversations end with hello
No one gives a damn if I'm there or not
Hot girls holding their drinks
They must think their s**t don't stink
I say Hi and they don't care why
Damn I want to hide
Deep inside I want to die
If I said I am having a good time
Ha that's a lie
I'm just a small fry
In this big world
I might as well go home
And play with my PS3
Or my Nintendo Wii
There I am free
Free from a boring party
No one notices that I left
I am not being missed
While they are in a party bliss
Now I'm gonna start eating my jello
Conversations end with hello

Author's Note

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

LOVE the rhythm and flow of this, written with eloquent freestyle (guessing.) - very releatable, as i feel the same way about being at parties you described in this poem. great write! love that Beck song too (dances) :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

i wrote this after having a bad night. Yes the Beck songs sums up how I felt that night...i sometimes put songs to my poems if the song or video reflects my poem

[ms. barrie]

yes i been there "masquerade" was such a night lol - so do i, thanks for sharing :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

the persona is somehow a flower in the wall
good write
=]

[Allycat]

amazing write and flow!
I can relate to this, I've been to a party where I didn't really know anyone and didn't really have anyone to talk to
thanks for sharing :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

thanks this was a horrible night for me......i wrote this down as soon as I got back to my apartment :P

[Marie]

If conversations end with "hello" maybe it's time to stop using the word. Learn soe amusing tricks instead--standing on your head, wiggling your ears, etc.

[afra]

OMG i know how it feels ....i hate it ....anyway awesome write

[Crazy Cat Man]

thanks this was a bad night for me..i wrote this as soon as I got back to my apartment

[C.C. Marx]

i get it its hard to talk to people sometimes and when you try, they give you looks like are you talking to me? Ehh people can be so rude! Anyways great job on the poem!

[Ees]

hmmm,
everyone's been there, at least to one party or two where they are awkward or don't really know how to talk to that sort of group...
I think that you get a little repetitive in the middle, maybe you don't need all of that, if the sentiments have already been portrayed well, and everybody understands, why do it again? I think it would have more impact if it were scaled back a little.

it's pretty good though.
Next time, don't try so hard, the conversation will prob happen naturally then.

[Rorenzu]

the title is captivating ... but i never thought this is about partying and being an outcast.

[Natasha]

so sad :( been there also.....i really love the title of the poem :D it's excellenttttt..the last 13 lines of the poem are my favorite

[kublakhan27]

This really speaks to me...it's as accurate a portrayal of this scenario as there can be...