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I lost my Ipod the other day :( so I wrote this poem about it

Damn I lost my carkeys
Where could it be
Damn I lost my cellphone
Maybe I left it at home
Damn I lost my Ipod
I blame it on God
Damn I lost my wallet
Maybe it has fallen
Damn I lost my credit card
I feel like a retard
Damn I lost my Ipad
Ugh I feel bad
Damn I lost my glasses
Where did I left it?
Damn I lost my senses
I feel reckless
Damn I lost my mind
Maybe its the wine
Damn I lost my brain
am I going insane?
Damn I lost my sanity
I'm slowly going into insanity
Damn I lost my humanity
Is it because the Knicks lost Linsanity
Damn I lost the will to live
There's nothing I can give
Damn I lost in the game of life
Now its the time to die

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

All that because you lost your Ipod?! o.O
It's curious how the first part is about losing objects, it's funny and even look like one of these children songs out there, but the second part change totally the mood of the poem, you talk about qualities we all should have, as human beings, and losing them is a total different thing, the bad mood of this second part reaches its peak in the very last verse.
Amazing, well done =D

[ewest1220]

Mad me think (I'm in the technology industry after all) very well done I liked this!

[Ama May Cooper]

Clear and easy to follow
A very simple piece, i was less favourable of this than your other work but i think thats personal prefrence rather than any flaws in your writing.
Quite dark , but presented in a sort of comic over lay. Very interesting.

[Gandré]

with your rhymes you make us smile and think.
why not to enjoy life, making it more simple.

[FreeSoulLoveDance]

LOL i like this! : ) it seems like me on an off day.

[That_Girl]

This got a bit serious towards the end... like a lot of your recent works... everything okay? lol I still love this. :) So damn true.

[Crazy Cat Man]

I have good news. I found my ipod haha my friend found it on his grass today then he texted me so i drove and got it :D im gonna recite this tomorrow

[That_Girl]

Oh perfect! lol you crack me up... :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

u should come to the club :) the club will embrace u. :) u will be a hit

[That_Girl]

Umm no. :) Not happening. I'd rather not be embraced by a group of strangers. ;) wtf would I even read?? My s**t is long...

[That_Girl]

Would I even be allowed in? lol

[Crazy Cat Man]

of course. the crowd will love u :)

[That_Girl]

So it's not a 21 and older club?

[Crazy Cat Man]

naw. or u can come to watch. i shall e-mail u the details later. i think u can meet authors and u can get their advice on getting ur own book published

[That_Girl]

You are so damn pushy.. but I'll take a look. :) B*****d...

[Crazy Cat Man]

i want to help u. lots of college students go to these things and network. :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

i finished 2 new funny poems haha :P

[That_Girl]

Pfft. Help me. You just want to meet my gorgeous a*s. ;)

But I don't like 'networking'. It's a pain in the a*s. I know enough people...

POST!!

[Crazy Cat Man]

Yes and that's true too :P. I just posted :D

[That_Girl]

I knew it! Men... so damn predictable! ;) jk jk

Awesome! I'll go look.

[Crazy Cat Man]

:)

[Owlgirl]

This is very very very relatable, and great job! This is excellent!

[Crazy Cat Man]

thanks. my friend found my ipod though :P haha so maybe i should erase this poem then :P

[Dean Kuch®]

Sounds just like my boys as they get ready to go out for the evening. Well, at least the first 16 lines or so...
Funny, the little things that can set you off, isn't it? These days, it doesn't take much!
Great stuff!

[Crazy Cat Man]

haha yup. I felt bad for losing it....then i had to compose myself that its not the end of the world. it is annoying there are worse things like losing a life. like the tragedy in Colarodo, thats real stuff :(

[afra]

awesome ......good job and keep writing

[Crazy Cat Man]

I lost my ipod :( this is inspired when I felt bad for losing other things :( :P oh well....we gotta laugh at life

[afra]

Some times this happens to me too....specially in the mornings when im getting late for school and I never find my stuff

[Crazy Cat Man]

my friend found my ipod today haha he saw it on his grass and he text me. i went to pick it up haha so perhaps i shall erase this poem then :P

[afra]

no dont do that ...i love this poem ...