Goodbye

the title says it all.

Goodbye
The time has come to an end
We will never be friends again
Not even on the internet
You will never know how I been
The time has come to let go
I will never again hear your voice
And this is my choice
You will forever be inside of my heart
But now is the time to depart
My soul is being ripped apart
You have been a part of my life for so long
But now is the time to say so long
We can no longer get along
You have moved on
So I don't know why you want to hold on
Like a sad old song
Is it because of my schlong?
Whatever it doesn't matter you're gone
I don't want you checking up on me
And ask hey what's going on?
I'm like please f**k off
I'm done
Now it's time to say goodbye
I know a part of me has died
But I'm feeling like a phoenix
All new and revived
I am alive
I know that it was
But I needed to say goodbye

Author's Note

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

That was intense and full of pathos, the metrica of the verses was perfect (can't talk about a structure), the sound was interesting: you've started with a rhyme scheme like AABBCC etc ... but then you went for something like GGGGGGGGGGGGGGG, it takes a lot of effort to make so many rhymes linked between'em and the result is up to the reader's tastes, personally that annoyed me, but hey, it's just me !
Great job =D

[R.A. Youngblood]

By the way, i like the song too! xD

[Crazy Cat Man]

I sometimes like to put songs that fits the poems :) this one kept coming into my mind so I put it there :P

[R.A. Youngblood]

Very deep, emotional, little bit sad. I like the way you expressed your feelings.
I can see your anger at the end "I'm like please f**k off" lol....And i can see your sadness at the beginning "You will forever be inside of my heart" xD.. That's a little bit confusing, but it's very good overall. Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

[Crazy Cat Man]

Thanks. Its based on saying goodbye to an exgf and also to lady friends who were slowly drifting apart. So its a mixed bag that's why I wrote "u will forever be inside of my heart" I do feel sad but its necessary. Hopefully ill find a new love and I will feel good again :) thanks for ur review

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, i hope you will! You're welcome :D

[BillyGirl]

"Is it because of my schlong?" gave me a giggle. Great write :)

[kayla]

"Is it because of my schlong?" lmao. Overally great poem(:

[Beck Louise]

"I'm like please f**k off" hahaha Love it ;)

[Crazy Cat Man]

yup sometimes we have to be harsh. :)

[Alicia Schroeder]

Nicely put.. Great write

[Debbie_Philly]

Well you told her... ;) way to write it out !!!

[Crazy Cat Man]

blah there was several poems about her :P several..probably too many :P oh well.....

[Debbie_Philly]

;)

[That_Girl]

I like the strong end. Fantastic "goodbye". :)