Impoverished

You're all circles.

Society is a box,
Straight lines and rectangles,
No circles or triangles,
No change in our pockets.


















-klbeaudry

Reviews

[Honestly, Abe]

This poem reminds me of every day in my poetry class:

"Condense this!"
"Make that shorter!"
"Too many words!"
"Express your meaning in the feeling, not the words themselves!"

So, way to condense this, and you kept it ambiguous enough to make the reader think, instead of just telling a story.

I'm pretty sure you would have aced my class haha.

[An owl on the moon]

A vivid expression of life's form and frame... lost in our absence of prosperity.. souls lacking meat. Stirs the mind...

[Bubo]

In four lines your writing is so strong that it makes us think........have we really become as you say? Yes.........thought provoking, and very strong.

[vincentbals]

Got me thinking again! Great job, thanks for sharing.

[Sports Girl]

Nice job. Short and to the point. I also like the picture

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I think the picture adds to the poem..short and thoughtful

[joseffthered]

Simple, to the point, the imagery is subtle but nice, the picture is a nice complement. I like it.

[Cassiopia Summers]

I like the shortness of the poem. It's well written, and uncomplicated. Just right. (=

[Forever Mine]

Very interesting... I like the picture also btw

[Colleen Hitchcock]

You nailed it. Great job! Love the poem and the pix.
Thank you for sharing!