Impoverished

You're all circles.

Society is a box,
Straight lines and rectangles,
No circles or triangles,
No change in our pockets.


















-klbeaudry

Reviews

[Honestly, Abe]

This poem reminds me of every day in my poetry class:

"Condense this!"
"Make that shorter!"
"Too many words!"
"Express your meaning in the feeling, not the words themselves!"

So, way to condense this, and you kept it ambiguous enough to make the reader think, instead of just telling a story.

I'm pretty sure you would have aced my class haha.

[Kristie]

This is simple and beautiful. A prime example that a piece of writing doesn't have to be long or drawn out to be great. Good job!

[Moonflower]

Precisely.

[paul]

brilliant. put a smile on my face.

[nostal]

Accurate, short. Nice.

[emily joe]

this was awesome! first thing i've read of yours, and i can already tell i'm going to like the rest. excellent job!

[Brittany W]

this was short but said so much, great write.

[Ruth]

Few lines say it all! lol
Concise and has a lot impact:)
We are indeed all in circles love! A circle that only the few wish to cut a dorway through and leave towards brighter shores where we see the truth amongst the lies!
Excellent poem!
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

Few people are willing to walk off the main road. I found few people who desire to roam with me when I was young. We could go or do anything on a weekend. I believe better to think and learn. Know what is right. Few people in the media and Government will ever tell you the truth. Only tell you what you want to hear. A outstanding poem. You made me think.
Coyote

[Marie Harrison]

Very mysterious, I like the mood it gives me. Excellent!