Fragility
A Poem by
KL
For Katie McKenzie and Jessica Thrasher, may you rest in peace.
Like a drop of rain in the wind, Like a fish in the ocean, Like a spark in the darkness, A clock ticks without motion. Like a diamond in mountains, Like a tree in the forest, Like a cloud in the sky, The choir sings without chorus. Like a shard of glass from a window, Like a torn page from a book, Like a burnt home in a field, A life; one more look. Like red candlewax melted, Like flame turned to ice, Like pond ripples at midnight, The devil grins twice. Like a gemstone buried, Like an hourglass shifted, Like a mirrors reflection, A perspective twisted. Like a star in the universe, Like a planet in space, Like a crater on the moon, Life is a race, is a race, is a race. And some leave too soon. -klbeaudry
© 2010 KL
Reviews
A bit redundant, but touching. I was reminded of John Denver when I read this.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Hmm...this was interesting. I can relate to what it says.
It kind of seemed that the rhythm became slightly redundant as the reader got towards the end. But, I do think that each stanza you have is saying something important; that each adds to the piece and..kind of builds up to the last one. So, it works. I like this.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Hmm...this was interesting. I can relate to what it says.
It kind of seemed that the rhythm became slightly redundant as the reader got towards the end. But, I do think that each stanza you have is saying something important; that each adds to the piece and..kind of builds up to the last one. So, it works. I like this.
I would think about changing the second "diamond", as it was somewhat distracting, having already been used. Otherwise, I thought this was beautifully written, and was a wonderful tribute. Brilliant piece.
-Coral-
Posted 14 Years Ago
I would think about changing the second "diamond", as it was somewhat distracting, having already been used. Otherwise, I thought this was beautifully written, and was a wonderful tribute. Brilliant piece.
-Coral-
Beautifully voiced love, as always :)
A glow in the darkness, a remarkable dance with sombre shadows :)
Stunning!
xx
Posted 14 Years Ago
Beautifully voiced love, as always :)
A glow in the darkness, a remarkable dance with sombre shadows :)
Stunning!
xx
beautiful poem..love it!
Posted 14 Years Ago
beautiful poem..love it!
This is beautiful, sir.
Simply wonderful, touching. Great job. This would make a good song.
Posted 14 Years Ago
This is beautiful, sir.
Simply wonderful, touching. Great job. This would make a good song.
nice flow. booyah achieved.
Posted 14 Years Ago
nice flow. booyah achieved.
Fragility has loads of wonderful imagery throughout ... Life is fragile and whether we run the gambit of a spark or a blaze throughout our lives, we all make our mark on others and your tribute to these two ladies prove that ... Bravo, KL ...100%
LLR
Posted 14 Years Ago
Fragility has loads of wonderful imagery throughout ... Life is fragile and whether we run the gambit of a spark or a blaze throughout our lives, we all make our mark on others and your tribute to these two ladies prove that ... Bravo, KL ...100%
LLR
beautiful.
Posted 14 Years Ago
beautiful.
Beautiful poem.
"Like a diamond buried,
Like an hourglass shifted,
Like a mirrors reflection,
A perspective twisted."
Is my favourite stanza.It's so deep, yet so true. I simply love those words.
Damn, this is great. Going in to favourites.
Thanks for sharing this.
Vincent.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Beautiful poem.
"Like a diamond buried,
Like an hourglass shifted,
Like a mirrors reflection,
A perspective twisted."
Is my favourite stanza.It's so deep, yet so true. I simply love those words.
Damn, this is great. Going in to favourites.
Thanks for sharing this.
Vincent.
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Added on August 16, 2010
Last Updated on September 21, 2010
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KL Vancouver, Canada
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"If you chase two rabbits, you will lose them both." - Native American saying
Twenty years. A poet, an author, an expressionist. I believe in originality, I believe in art, I believe in myself.
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