Freedome

Freedome

Free me from filth,
from rock, from silt
Free me from sin,
from stone and from guilt
Looking outward to hills
where the house has
been built

Give me a star, a moon,
and sand.

Free me from pain,
from disease, from strain
Free me from plague,
from age and from game
Looking up to the sky
where the waxing
moon wanes

Give me a pen, a pad,
and a brain.

Reviews

[Honestly, Abe]

What an interesting way of expressing the truth inside ourselves. Once the filth and excess is rubbed away, the interior of our hearts is raw and honest. The title fits perfectly.

"Looking up to the sky
where the waxing
moon wanes"

That's my favorite few lines. I find myself looking up at the moon often for inspiration, and it's one of my favorite symbols in literature.

Another nice piece of work from you. As always. (:

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the poem. Give me the moon, the sky and a great ocean. Allow me to write in peace. A beautiful poem. I like it all.
Coyote

[SimplyDisastrous]

I have absolutely fell in love with this. Favorite! (:

[Lilly]

Oh- I really enjoyed this poem. Beautiful images and concept - pull apart, seperate ourselves from everything we encounter in the world to be free and be ourselves....
Wonderful work.

[Nova]

I don't know what to say :D
Beautiful.
"Give me a star, a moon and sand." I can't help thinking this the inspiration a writer needs while "Give me a pen, a pad, and a brain." is what the writer wants. Their kind of freedom. This is piece is wonderful.

[Brittany W]

I love this, the point your trying to portray is clear, and you wrote about it so well, its really gripping, great write.

[Moonflower]

I like the sense of pulling your world apart and leaving nothing but your true self. Lovely.

[Kesha]

Wow! What an amazing poem!

[Miss Coral]

Perfection. Both what you were portraying, and the piece itself. I love the off-beat rhymes and the imagery. I didn't find your usual style in this one as much, which was a bit disappointing, but this still managed to be a great write.
Overall, nice piece. :)

-Coral-

[Marie Harrison]

This is a writer's paradise. Beautiful vistas I see!