Beneath the Floor

Everything about this life is speculation... don't play it off as fact.

Time to take a look, past the web and dust,
This life is all dimensions--forgotten
Lies take on the form of ghosts, without trust;
But there is the Thinker, thinking rotten
Thoughts that linger back and forth, finding faith.
Digging deeper, searching for the headless;
It worms its way through time, through frozen space,
Around stars, suns, slaves, hiding from success.
Finally found, the answer lies in cracks,
Inside a mirror of a mirror, glass
And body impeding a hand of black;
Tempting, touching, but the truth has no mass.
The Thinker thinking upon a glass floor,
Not the while knowing his mind and more.

 

 

 

Author's Note

First Shakespearean sonnet, written at age 16.

Reviews

[Nova]

Wonderful. I'm amazed you wrote this when you were sixteen. It's very thought provoking and I love your word choice.

Really nice work! One of my fvourites. :)

[Christopher.Holmberg]

I really enjoy this dude, especially when considering that you wrote this at 16

[Miss Coral]

Great piece- sonnets are ridiculously hard, haha. Much better than anything I could write, and you were younger than I am now. :)
Wonderful word choices and rhythm.

-Coral-

[Moonflower]

Expertly portrayed and written. Wonderful job, dear.

[Brittany W]

Another great piece, at 16 you were an amazing poet, as you are now, great job.

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you are a deep thinker my friend..loved this..will keep in my library as needs more attention to soak in the meanings..16 you say? well I wish I had this mind at 16..I might not be where I am today if I had..

[Cassiopia Summers]

Definitely exquisite. Wonderful writing, and the ending just works. It's great. The flow is fantastic. My favorite lines were,
"Finally found, the answer lies in cracks,
Inside a mirror of a mirror, glass
And body impeding a hand of black;
Tempting, touching, but the truth has no mass.
The Thinker thinking upon a glass floor,
Not the while knowing his mind and more."

[Ruth]

WOW! Truly excellent love :) This is fabulous!
Everything grounded then flying, surreality inspected, light in truth? Is all reality or is there something else tangible?
This is excellent, I LOVE this!
xx

[Marie Harrison]

Wow, it's amazing. It's dark and ominous too. I can't believe you wrote this when you were 16! Great.