Grief

I hide
in the shadows
shedding my tears
that fall from me in a stream
 splashing into a river
that rushes
to the ocean
of pain
created by all the grief
of the world

Reviews

[EmmaT306]

I like how you start the poem with hiding in the shadows. This image fits well with grief since it is a dark emotion.

[Coyote Song]

Thanks very much.

[Jeannear]

short but says a lot....good job very nice

[Coyote Song]

Thanks very much!

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Very expressive work with just a few words..I has good metaphoric usage..I enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments are very positively uplifting..Sara

[Coyote Song]

Thank you very much.

[Tina Kline]

Yes, outstanding work. Grief is this, and right now the whole world does seem to be an ocean of grief. Well done! Impressive.

[Coyote Song]

Thank you!

[Black Cat Fever]

A powerful emotional poem bull of sadness.
Very impressive and cleverly done.
Fantastic poem!

[Coyote Song]

Thank you!!

[Black Cat Fever]

You're welcome!

[Leslie Philibert]

A writer I have admired for many years, a gentle, considered poet. This a Haiku/Tanka like write, cleverly set out and perfectly balanced. Excellent.

[Coyote Song]

Thank you!