Lurking Beneath

Rain
pounding on my roof
all night long
pounding
hour after hour
as the wind blows
rattling the tree limbs
by dawn
a huge puddle
the size of a pond
hugs the corner near my home
too big
to drive through
or wade through
I look down at
its grey rippling surface
reflecting back me and my friends
and the grey overcast sky
and wonder
what sort of sea creature
lurks beneath
waiting
waiting
waiting
waiting
waiting for what?
to catch little children
like me
and my friends?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of both "IT" by stephen king with Pennywise the clown hiding in the sewers.waiting to catch little children...and the legend of the lock ness monster, although the puddle wouldn't be quite deep enough.

i also relate to this lovely piece, remembering when we lived in Lockport.
our yard had depression in it..and this"L" shaped lake would form during a heavy rain...

in winter it would freeze and we could play hockey on it.

thanks for the trip back.

jacob

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[Black Cat Fever]

Ah yes. I remember the monsters lurking in the bottomless mud puddles. A wonderful poem!

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[Brandon S. Whitten]

Lovely poem and an excellent write.

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[lee von cleef]

The third page of your children's book.

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[Tina Kline]

I like this. A tad bit dark but playful in a way too. Children can come up with all sorts of magical and spooky ideas. I like the one you describe in your poem.

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[Eric Cox]

Nicely done. Good imagery and chill to the end of this. I like the idea created of a very deep puddle holding a sea creature, you never know, those puddles can get pretty deep! Very nice creative pen upon this horror poem.

[Coyote Song]

Thanks Eric. :)

[Eric Cox]

welcome :)