The Three Doors

Just something from my Creative Writing class. I deem it worthy for public viewing. :) Enjoy!

The three doors stand like lurking omens; tall, menacing-looking omens. Scratches cover the entire first door. There’s no doorknob on the second door. The third door looks anything but exciting. 

I have to choose one, though. Choose the right door, my future is set. That’s how simple it is for me. When I first heard of the three doors, I said I would choose the first door, the door of opportunity. Now I’m thinking that maybe I should choose more carefully. The first door is not looking do good for me. The door of challenge looks even more uninviting. The door of encouragement does not look very encouraging.

     Which should I choose?

     I know that whichever door I choose, that is it. No second chances, no turning back. People who had chosen wrong came back with nothing but grief. They all looked drained and zombie-like.

     I promised my mother I would not let that happen to me. I plan to keep that promise. I sat down on the cold rock and thought. I don’t know how long I sat there. Thoughts were running through my head at light speed. All of a sudden, the madness stopped. My head held onto one thought. I smiled.

     I stood up and stepped in front of the door with no handle. Could it be this easy? I simply pushed the door and it creaked open. White light spewed out. I stepped through and the door closed behind me.   

 

Author's Note

I copied it from Word. That's why it looks all freaky.

Reviews

[Gabriella]

A very interesting read indeed. I, for one, love the symbolism of doors and windows and the like and it seems that this piece is just full of it. I know it's supposed to be sort of surreal but I'd like to hear more about the narrator's thoughts and situations, as well as how s/he came to this place with three doors. Also, I know this is very difficult as I've dealt with it myself, but I guess you use the word "door" quite a few times and it feels really repetitive to me. But yeah, how can you not? If I were you I'd look over this again and see if you want to change anything, namely your initial description of the doors. Good job with this and good luck in the future with your writing.

[Elvina CZq]

This one is like choosing the path you wish to walk on. It might be short, but the narrator has spoken the thoughts and picked the choice. Nicely written.

[fogisbeautiful]

Wow, I think I liked this one most of all. Your first line was captivating and the descriptions were superb. I like the mystery of the doors, that we don't really know quite what's going on, but we're drawn in anyway. My only suggestion (sorry, I always try to mention room for improvement) is be careful to make sure that your reader understands clearly which door is which. For a moment I was confused about which door belonged to which name. After I read it again, I got it, but it's just something you might take a look at.