Take Me Away

My First Published FreeVerse Poetry

take me away
take me far from this place
to a place with no people
ill be gone with no trace
leave nothing behind
memories fade and they die
in a place where the blind
can see all
in a place where the deaf
hear more not less
to a place where we're safe
to a place that is warm,

take me away to a place
where we're equal,
too a place with no people
ill be gone with no trace
leaving nothing to waste
except all memories
lost that where evil,

take me away to a place that is hidden
a place where religions forbidden
a place with no guns
a safe place to have fun
can you take me
if not then ill run..

Author's Note

5min FREEVERSE

Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

Well, that's hardly free verse Tom, in fact it's very strongly structured. There are a couple of typo's or misspellings - due probably to the fact that it was written in a hurry, but it's certainly an interesting piece.
Line 4 - 'I'll' not 'ill'. V2. line 3 - 'to' not 'too' and again, line 4 'I'll'. V2. Line 7 'were' not 'where'. Verse 3 Line 2 - 'religion's' and last line again 'I'll'.

[Tom Robert Cowpey]

thankyou, and what i meant about freeverse was i literally wrote it line by line no planning involved. took me 5 minutes on iphone that is why spelling is terrible.. thankyou so much for the review and thankyou there will be much more to come this year of 2013.

[gabrielle]

written in five minutes? i could not do that. Wow!