TICK TOCK.

TICK.

I hit the floor,

my scream

kissing the air

in poignant despair.

My eyes slam shut,

my heart pumps blood-

and it stops.

My veins run cold and empty,

my face pale and twisted...

no tears.

No fears.

TOCK.

My vision swarms,

my lips sting

with every kiss and touch

they've ever shared with yours.

My hands itch

you're a f*****g b***h.

I'd love to hold you,

then strangle you with

your own intestines.

I'm crying.

I'm dying.

TICK.

Another second,

I can't stand it.

I find my savior.

The knife I've held close.

I kiss my wrists,

loving this bliss...

Blood rains onto the floor,

I can take no more...

Only a little deeper.

I love you....

I hate you....

TOCK.

My skin is ragged,

torn and spliced.

My veins weep their bloody tears,

taking with them my fears...

And I'm looking into death's

bloodshot eyes

once more.

My nude back

meets the cold floor.

It slips

from my quivering lips.

TICK.

MATTHEW.

KYLE.

ASHLEY.

You've made something,

you have,

you've bred a monster...

And I'll run to the devil,

make love with him,

and haunt you forever more.

I'm smiling,

you're dying.

TOCK.

I'm already dead, you see.

You've killed me.

The shriek my heart

let loose, is echoing...

It's vibrating my empty chest.

My heart is bones and ashes,

bloody thorns embedded 

in my shriveling stomach,

and I'm long since dead.

I'm gone.

You're wrong.

Reviews

[Krista]

Its very well written but creates a very sad picture in my mind. As I sit here reading this I am thinking I know how it feels to want to do what you explained so well in this writing. Its a very sad feeling to wish you were dead and that nobody sees you or cares about you but you must know that I care about you.

[Joseph - Michael]

It's quite an interesting tale of revenge and redemption... Slowly haunting and taunting as the seconds go by, one at a time...

Other than that, I've enjoyed reading it and it's all pretty great tho...

[Matthew Kult]

Uhm...right on. I like the darkies. Make me smile. Good work, good flow. I like the style use. Good read.

[Ima]

a very sad yet meaningful poem...

[Poeticpiers]

Powerfully expressing deep emotions enhanced by the ticking clock as though they are happening in real time

[Jonathan Ballam]

Keep Away From Children, and people whose name's end in Manson.

I'm quite surprised you didn't consider to rate this one as mature. Anyhoo it was a bloody good read (mind the pun)!

[J.M]

Wow the clock noises really add to this already potent poem. Its very creative and the way you've written it, its almost the reader can feel the pain in it.

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is an awesome poem and i love it and you made this seem so real

[An owl on the moon]

I love the vivid formate.. repetition to drive in a power rhythm. Saw a gripping imagery with mingling of love and hate, and rich emotions run wild.

[Kevin]

Great poem. Powerful and filled with raw emotion. Bravo