A Little Taste Of Heaven

I will take off my halo if you take off your wings

I will give a little taste of heaven in my own ways

You have to invincable I sure aint no saint

But I will take you to heaven with just alittle kiss

Reviews

[John-Paul H.]

umm...well, it's not bad. There are grammatical errors, like the number of synonyms. A poem's synonym usually is something like...
top line-5
middle line-6
bottom line-5
You don't have to rhyme, which I notice you didn't. And lastly, I'm wondering if you forgot to include something before invisible?

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

I like the way you are doing the bargaining :-)

[MOON]

Great idea.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

loved the atmosphere you've created, very cool :)
short and to the point, played very well on metaphores/identifications :)

[Jaz Onerheim]

it's a little short and there is some grammer probs and some missing words

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Sometime a sweet kiss is a memory never forgotten. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Madeline]

ooo perttyyyyy! :D cute!!! me likey!

[Kuro]

Short, sweet and touching, nice

[Victoria Elizabeth]

i love it dont let haters hate!!